When I am 27, I see a therapist for the first time. His name is Rafe. He doesn't sit behind a desk. He sits in a chair across from the couch where I sit, staring at me until we are both uncomfortable. I clear my throat, look at my fingernails, prepare lies so I can tell him what he wants to hear. He says, “A girl like you is too damn pretty to have any problems.” He leans back, his chair creaking beneath his weight. He laces his fingers behind his head, pleased with himself.
He is pleased with himself. I uncross my legs, pull my skirt up a few inches. I have great legs. I hate him. Because I hate him, I will fuck him and defeat the purpose of being here. Rafe uncrosses his legs, smiles, moves next to me. He is not subtle. He twists his head to the right and drags one finger from the tip of my chin to the small expanse of skin where my blouse falls open. I think about my husband, who is dead, who has left me in this position. He is, he was, he is a lean, hard man—a long distance runner. He ran and ran and ran. All he loved was me and running, and then one day, he ran too far and his heart gave out. “Yes,” he says. “You're definitely too pretty for therapy.” I look down and see him, already stiff in his pressed khakis. I know how to play my part. I lay back, one arm draped over my head. I kick off my shoes and drag my foot up Rafe's leg and between his thighs. He groans, climbing on top of me. He says things I don't need to remember. I let him fuck me and I stare at the clock, listening to it tick and tock as he breathes heavily and crushes me, covering me with vile airs. My husband would hate this fat man. The therapist comes quickly and I push him off. He falls to the floor and laughs, staying on the shag carpet. He laces his fingers behind his head again. He is pleased with himself.
i love this story am feel honored to be the first to say so here!
really good.
A lot to admire in this vignette "Because I hate him, I will fuck him and defeat the purpose of being here."
"All he loved was me and running, and then one day, he ran too far and his heart gave out."
Really strong work!
send it to dept of titles--2 or 3 things we know about titles, pls
I really enjoyed this piece, especially the lines, "My husband would hate this fat man" and the "he is, he was, he is." Really great stuff.
This story tears at me, claws at my face while I'm reading it. I just shake it off and read again and again. Thanks for that. Great stuff, Roxane.
Favorite line: "I uncross my legs, pull my skirt up a few inches." This was when I had my holy-hell-that's-how-this-is-going
-to-play gut punched sucking of wind moment.
I like this story. I like stories with girls with great legs. Good job!
Prett girls make graves...
Thanks Meg, Charles, Marcelle, Gary, Amy, Sheldon and Jason for your comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed this little story.
So excellent.
Again, again, again, great voice. The one paragraph structure is perfect here.
Nice work, great title!
Thanks Cami and Tim. Thank you too, Kathy. I've been playing with one paragraph stories of varying lengths lately. I'm really enjoying it.
I remember reading this in the Digest and getting to the "uncrossed legs / hiked skirt" line already lauded above and thinking, "how the hell is she going to pull this off in such a little tiny space?" It's like dropping a sounding line into a well of misery. Excellently executed.
Holy jumping jehosaphat. Made me madder, until I reread the title and then I liked it, too.
I think the present tense really works here, too. I enjoyed reading this and I put my face closer to the monitor as I did so.
Really great. Love the pacing and movement of this.
This story seems, how shall I say it, to explore a cliché. It’s well put, but I can imagine a much more interesting story about how she deflects his advances, one that would avoid the stereotypical and allow exportations of the characters.
Thanks Jason, Adam, Jamey, Adam and Ravi.
Dirk, thanks for your comment. You raise an interesting observation. I wasn't really interested in writing a story about her deflecting the therapist's advances... I don't think that holds much interesting potential. This woman is all kinds of messed up. She wouldn't say no. The story may be clichéd but it is the kind of thing I like to write.
Wonderful, as always, Roxane! You totally nailed the title and last line.
I have to say, I don't think this is a cliche at all. Most people in therapy talk to, rather than have sex with, their therapists.
I think you brilliantly conveyed her resignation based on her "messed up" interpretation that it was her "part" to give him what he wanted. very, very nice.
Thanks, Lauren. I'm glad I'm not the only one who doesn't think it is a cliché.
Wow. I'm new here, so late in the day with this comment. But wow. I believe you've nailed it.
Thanks very much, Juhi.
Oh hell, Roxane I want to smack this therapist with a spade, with his smugness and his rapid ejaculations.
So do I, Claire. So do I.
Deliciously raw. Love this.
Thanks so much, Rae.
this is excellent and hard but, not being a girl with a pretty face, i've known therapists like rafe. there's a reason why i've given up on therapy.
"All he loved was me and running, and then one day, he ran too far and his heart gave out."
One of the most beautiful and heartbreaking lines ever...
Disturbing. Perfect title.
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This makes me feel hollow, somehow.
I love the imagery in this piece. Felt like I was right there in that room watching!
But the real question is, did he charge her insurance? I'll bet he did. As a therapist who knows what goes on out there, this story infuriates me, as it should. You did a great job writing it and conveying the woman's own grief, emptiness and silent rage. She is going to need so much real therapy to get past this. Very effective and disturbing.
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I loved it. I was a pretty face once, and a widow now, so I feel the authenticity of this small, yet huge story. Thank you.