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"whisper to me / of smoked paprika sunsets"
Excellent, Rene!
"for one last breath" would suffice and with greater effect.
Delicious! *
A fine piece, Rene.
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Excellent. Agree with t;he comment by Gary. Maybe could do without "screaming." "*"
It's fine the way it is.
The sunsets are screaming, she isn't.
*You're so good at this.
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paprika sunsets. *