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Yoiks. *

My inner grammarian wants you to edit out the word "of."

Your last line rocks.

Especially connect with the second half -

"slice
into
her
if
she got too close

next time, she'd wear the armour."

thank you everyone! greatly appreciated.

Gita, thank you for the tip. I re-read it and concluded that your advice made it much stronger :)

*Smooth and sharp.

Wonderful! For me, you don't even need the last line.
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I agree with Bill. I think you should cut the last line but use it as the title, that would be perfect.

I agree with Bill and SDR. Then it will be a gem. *

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Thank you Nonnie, Bill, SDR and Daniel! Much appreciated.

Interesting thought to use it as the title ...
I'm attached to it, however :)