She sits there primly, quietly, a smile playing on her face. The smile is an almost permanent one, lips sloping upward at the corners. Not a grin or leer, not a false beam showing too many perfectly tended teeth. I imagine if you were the minister and woke in the morning, her sleeping beside you, the laugh lines holding her smile in place would crease into gentler canyons.
But back to the wife. She sits in the front pew, always, in the seat closest to the wall, settling in three minutes before service. I use her entrance as a clock for when to deposit the coffee cup, finish the conversation, and scan the sanctuary for my seat. I often choose the empty space beside someone new, someone of the female persuasion, for there is something quite delicious about the air between people strange to each other, something that makes my skin crackle alive with the possibility of touch. During the service hands brush against the other in opening the shared hymnal, when passing the offering basket. After the benediction, the smiles, the exchange of names. I mention I am a poet. She smiles - how romantic! — and the lure is set.
But today I sit three-quarters back on the other side of the room, the view to the front unobstructed. The minister strides past, black robes swooshing. All rise at the organ's stridency. Before sitting she always touches her husband — his hand, his shoulder, the back of his neck. I almost imagine the feel of those dry, manicured fingers. Today is not different. After that caress he smiles and stands before us. She smoothes her skirt around her knees, shushing the children. A paragon of virtue: her daughters clean and polite, her words kind, her potlucks impeccable. The prelude begins.
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"there is something quite delicious about the air between people strange to each other, something that makes my skin crackle alive with the possibility of touch." I keep reading this bit wishing I had written it. . . fave
Entirely seduces the reader through pure, strategic innuendo.
Delicious
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I hate Politics but I love this story. Seems there's a devil in the chapel.
I'm not one for politics but I love this story. Seems there's a devil in the chapel.
I'm not one for politics but I love this story. Seems there's a devil in the chapel.
Beautiful. I love the line about delicious air between strangers. *
Wonderful phrasing to this character sketch, Linda. Great touch with details throughout. Really like this work. Couldn't help but connect this piece with a slanting side of Ingmar Bergman's great Winter Light.
"I use her entrance as a clock for when to deposit the coffee cup, finish the conversation, and scan the sanctuary for my seat. I often choose the empty space beside someone new, someone of the female persuasion, for there is something quite delicious about the air between people strange to each other, something that makes my skin crackle alive with the possibility of touch."
Looking foward to the more to come. *
Beautifully crafted prelude. So much unsaid. And oh, Lordy, that smile! Sends shivers up & down my spine!
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MaryAnne, thank you for your kind words and fave. Peace...
James, thank you, this is all innuendo. This man is quite the letch - he'll be fun to write. Peace...
Roberto, thank you so much for reading -- and yes, there's a devil in the Chapel -- more than one, in fact! Peace...
Chris, thank you so much for the kind words and star! Peace...
Sam, your comment re Ingmar Bergman made my evening. Big smile! I always appreciate when you take the time to read my words. Peace...
Jack, so happy I got shivers running down , your back. I'm having fun with this story, feels good to be mucking around with something new. Peace...
this is fascinating.
Meg, thank you for reading! Only a character sketch, a two-fer, as I dig around the skeleton of another novel. Peace...
Great writing, Linda. Your fantastic way of hypnotically inducing the reader, and the amorphous space you so bewitchingly draw with finesse. LOVE this! Fave.
Robert, thanks for reading -- I appreciate your enthusiasm in this and all things! Peace...
Church politics? Don't get me started; I've had enough for a lifetime.
I almost felt guilty reading this, like I was seeing through the voyeur's eyes. This is like the opening moments, brooding, quiet music, of a serious film drama.
This made me so uncomfortable which is of course a great tribute to the power of this story. Relish reading lots more about these people.
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Mark, thanks so much for reading - and happy you felt voyeuristic - that is my intent. Peace...
Susan, so happy this story made you uncomfortable -- thanks for the generous read and the fave! Peace...
That middle paragraph is so good, nestled tightly between two other very well-written pieces...but it's the middle I love the most. Really great writing, Linda. *
This is wonderful. Your pace and punctuation--artfully constructed. This was a joy to read. Smartly woven.
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Great glimpse here. As a lay evangelist's daughter I of course look forward to more of this. Stuff I won't have to write (though would have liked to--some of your prose is just marvelous). *
All, thank you for reading this character sketch -- this is a character I very much enjoy writing and, in the end, eviscerating ;^) Peace...