An angel in her white dress and long veil, the pearls around her alabaster neck. Her voice, almost a whisper,
"I do," she said.
But she didn't look up at him when she said it. He should've known better. This is why he's walking the streets of her hometown in the middle of the night. Too skittish for sex, so he left in frustration, she in tears. He sighs, looks up, and sees that somehow, he's back at the church.
Of course. He's back where he started.
He gets up, crosses the street, stands in front of the carved mahogany doors; it is a scene from the Ascension. The Blessed Mary, rising up into heaven. Already she is transformed. He is a stranger here as well. What does she want from him? His new young wife? He is just a man who fell in love with a girl. Who did the right thing; waited, sought release in the arms of high-heeled women. This is what his father told him. This is what his mother told him. So why is he here, alone, on his wedding night?
He tries the door and is surprised to find it is open. Once inside, he automatically dips his finger into the holy water and blesses himself. It's dark, but attenuated yellow light spills onto the altar from the sacristy. He sees several wedding bouquets still up there. They are his flowers, from his wedding, and he wants one. Defiantly he walks the length of the church, towards the altar. But what is that? Out of the corner of his eye, he sees movement, looks around, slightly panicked.
No, he reassures himself, I am alone. I am the only person awake in this godforsaken town. He continues walking up the aisle, his heels striking the marble floor, echoing. He can smell the wooden benches, the incense, the religion. He stops to pick up a stray bloom on a pew, stands up again, and sees her. Instead of a statue, the Virgin Mary, it is now a beautiful woman. She is smiling at him.
He freezes. He cannot move a muscle. But its not fear that paralyzes him, it is desire. She walks as if she has just stepped out of a cloud, tall and proud. She pulls a blossom from around her waist and affixes it in her hair. She has red lips, she is not human, and she is getting closer. His mouth is dry.
When she finally reaches him, she caresses his mouth with her index finger,“The groom?,” she asks, smiling. “Yes,” he replies. “Take off your pants,” she says.
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Originally commissioned for an anthology about sex and religion. The editor didn't like the male point of view. So I forgot about it, and unearthed it recently for my blog, The Velvet Chamber, A Call for Writers, http://talesfromthevelvetchamber.blogspot, edited it down, and here it is.
--sought release in the arms of high-heeled women.--
a fine story, so good--
thanks, really enjoy writing from the male p.o.v.
i often write from the female pov, lol
i often write from the female pov, lol
Not sure I totally understand what's happening at the end but I enjoyed reading it very much. Really good writing and storytelling.
he finds someone else to have sex with on his wedding night ;)
Oh, I really liked this one. Loved the line:
"But she didn't look up at him when she said it. He should've known better. " It says it all.
The scene is wonderfully rendered. It has a timeless feel to it. Could be today, could be the 1950s.
This line, "No, he reassures himself, I am alone. I am the only person awake in this godforsaken town." brought me out of it a bit, I think because it's suddenly "I". Just my thought.
The editor was an idiot!
I hadn't thought about that, about the "I" that makes sense thank you
That not looking up at him when she said 'I do' -- sets the tone for the whole thing. I like this a lot -- sex and religion, what's not to like? Cherise is right!
Thanks, editor wasn't looking for male p.o.v., but it was so much fun writing from that perspective.
mmmm . . . my church would have said tough luck buddy, get counseling. Maybe if I went to this one I never would have left. Sex & Religion? Best when they are left on their own. Enjoyed the parable, the off-beat idea, well conceived & done.
A well written piece, LA. Great tone here. I like the very specific and direct approach to the writing: "He freezes. He cannot move a muscle. But its not fear that paralyzes him, it is desire. She walks as if she has just stepped out of a cloud, tall and proud. She pulls a blossom from around her waist and affixes it in her hair."
Good work.
Dear Walter and Sam, great to have the male p.o.v. on this story, thank you so much.