As the hour crept towards midnight, the pain worsened, and my father, the Lord and the King, began to beat his head against the stone walls of his room. As blood trickled from his ears, his nose and finally his eyes, he knew the end was near:
Go on and take me, he taunted the gods. Release me. I implore you!
He screamed so loud the world went black, and he could smell the lily and the gentian on the banks of the River Styx--- but instead of death, a tiny crack eased open in the bones of his skull. It got bigger and bigger, and up from the guts of his medulla, came a tiny, baby girl. Me. From death came life. From pain came beauty. I slipped out, covered in mucus and bone fragments, almost lost in a sea of sweat and blood--- like a fish flopping on shore, wriggling and slippery. And hungry, so hungry.
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Mythological narrative in the spririt of Angela Carter's The Bloody Chamber, http://www.amazon.com/The-Bloody-Chamber-Other-Stories/dp/014017821X
Oh yeah... love this, love the chaos that ensued before the birth so horrible but in such lyric language.
Make your students read this one; they won't mess with you. *
Good writing - "He screamed so loud the world went black, and he could smell the lily and the gentian on the banks of the River Styx--- but instead of death, a tiny crack eased open in the bones of his skull."
Enjoyed the read.
Loving the re-makes. Hoping for more.
Really enjoyed the way this keeps the spirit and imagery of the old stories. (I read Angela Carter almost as a writing textbook in my dark fantasy days, I'll have to read those books again, soon)
Enjoyed both #1 and #2. Image piles on image. What a rush.*
Superb, Lillian. My fav of these so far.
thanks everyone, any notes also appreciated!
I wanted to do a remake a long while ago, and for the life of me I can't remember the myth- it's a really famous Greek one I fell in love with in Humanities class.
This is my favorite line:
He screamed so loud the world went black, and he could smell the lily and the gentian on the banks of the River Styx--- but instead of death, a tiny crack eased open in the bones of his skull."
Superb imagery, here. *
Hi There. I like this story. Please try playing it back on a computer voice at SLOW speed. (I prefer Apple Vicki.) Yeah, though, the medical stuff keeps me from putting her down. The medulla thing doesn't give her much distinction from the mouse, at the end of the day. I want to encourage you, however, because I believe in building from the bottom up, one day at a time, like Eve--- leg, leg, body, arm, arm, head. And then build Rome in the same fashion. Sorry I was up all night on valium and melatonin and carbs worrying about my appointment at noon.
I've always been fascinated by Athena (though hardly ever liked her). This is marvellous. *