backwash

The first three lines seem a perfect haiku.

Nice but I thought I'd try an edit:

geese fly in a v
smudge a vacant sky
a hollow afternoon

a dischordant song
echoes in the backwash
muddying the water.

A gem.

*, Kitty. Excellent close.

Agree with Samuel's edits.*

The bleak, noirish feel is masterfully done. I can hear Brando above the squealing gulls: I coulda been a contendah!

Got it.*

Thank you, David, Samuel, Gary, David, Amanda, Matt and Tim for your comments and your suggestions. Much appreciated.

Evoked a feeling of being slightly buzzed on an iron-gray day, enjoying fuzzy isolation while the rest of the world is somewhere else.

This is so lovely and perfect! I liked SDR's edit.

Thank you, Adam and Rachna!