by J.A. Pak
Taking A Walk I See
13 rookson a lifeless tree
waitingI Wrap My Sweater Tight Around Me
And Continue Around the Bend
But There
In a hole, against the wall
One bunny, two bunny
Three bunny, four
Five bunny, six bunny
Seven bunny, more
Heaped together
Neatly stacked
Even
Babies no longer
Than a hand
Eyes all closed
A hoard disturbed
So I try to Refocus
But See
Leaves turning into birds,
birds, old men.
From A Desolate Distance
Nothing is as it seems,
the eye only catch thoughts
and single moments
and I think
they should not belong
together.
I Go Home And Shut The Door
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I suppose this is a companion piece to "Tales From the Country": http://www.ja-pak.com/Country.html
Lots of cool thought patterns about parts and wholes. nice work
Went along willingly and appreciated being able to share each moment. For me, the piece closed beautifully with "and I think they should not belong together."
I like the form and flow of the lines & sections. Good piece.
Thanks for your wonderful comments, Marc, Carol, Sam!
I like how the mind and eye shuts with the closing of the door.
Thanks so much, Sally. I'm glad the ending "works".
I like the "cinematography" in this, being held together by "I see" and "I think." *
Thanks so much, Beate. It really was that intersection of "see" and "think" that I wanted to explore.