I kept my seat. Passengers packed in the aisle weren't moving and until they were, neither was I.
“Could you at least stand?”
Hours earlier, I had attempted benign conversation with the man next to me. These attempts were met with disdainful silence that, if silences could speak, would have said conversation was not an option.
Nearly two hours later, I hoped my own silence said standing was not an option, either.
The doors opened and gasps filled the fuselage. A nervous queue began a two-footed crawl in the direction of daylight. At last I stood, merged in, and crawled with them. At the portal a memory demanded my attention and I paused, giving it time live again. It pulled me back to childhood and placed me atop a ladder. My brother, older and more experienced in the ways of the playground, stood at the bottom of a metal slide. “Come on, Brucey, you can do it!"
He used to call me Brucey. He was the only one who ever did.
Back in the present, no one beckoned from the bottom, but like I did back then, I jumped onto the slide. After a quick trip down, I stood and dusted my pants with both hands, and began following masses who lumbered along like a caravan crossing the desert.
“That was almost fun.”
It was my row mate. I didn't answer.
“Hey, did you hear me?”
“I did,” I said, “My name is Brucey.”
“We're fellow crash survivors.” he said. “We survived a plane crash. Together.”
I looked at the plane overhanging the runway by only a few feet, yellow tongues protruding from every opening. “We skidded off the runway,” I said. “You can't really call that a plane crash.”
“Sure you can.”
I looked again at the airplane and thought about things that had nothing to do with airplanes. Brucey. I liked the way that sounded. Still do.
Splendid narrative! I like it even more than I did the first time, Brucey!
I wouldn't have answered the son of a bitch either.*
Wow. I love the combination of dramatic and mundane (for that is how we live IMHO). *
Love the almost whimsical, ironically playful undertow.
Enjoyed!
"Brucey" - quite nice. I like how you describe this "plane crash".
Excellent work.
Really nice comments, thank you all.
Reminds me how... at the oddest moments of harsh realities, the mind gets all subtle and simple simultaneously.
Good work.
*****
The drama of the opening with the delayed cue frames the rest of the narrative well.
Good work.
The “Sure you can.” line reminds me of the last line of Beckett's "Dante and the Lobster." Try ending your story there and see what you think. To me, it's quite powerful.