It's a little known fact that eels are often lost in translation — only the spotted variety, not the striped or the common and certainly not the electric. The hippie girl who told me this lived her whole life in Montana. I didn't want to insult her intelligence — she was a very, very in-tune young woman — so I didn't ask how eels were ever involved in translation.
I think about that lovely hippie girl and her knowledge of eels, sometimes. I asked her name, and she said, “Aloha.” I told her it was a lovely name. She told me the word means both “hello” and “goodbye” and she danced away from without a backward glance, such so that I never knew if she was telling me “hello” as in “follow me” or “goodbye” as in “get lost creep.” Maybe it really was her name.
I was in London last year, it was raining, I was looking for eel pie and wondering if it was really made from eels and if so, were they spotted? I saw a woman who looked like my hippie girl, aged appropriately. I ran to catch up with her, fell into step with her on the street. She carried a burlap re-usable grocery bags stuffed with all kinds of exotic teas — ginseng and ginger, green chai and red oolong. I looked at her sideways and asked her if she'd been to Montana.
“Aloha,” she said, crossing the street against traffic. A bus — one of those double-deckers with tourists on top — went between us, splashing me with the habitat of a million spotted eels.
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This is a story from a Meg Pokrass freewrite prompt.
Neat! (goofy comment, I know, but I liked this)
Fave for reminding me of that kind of conversation.
splendid. eel pie! makes me hungry.
"I didn't want to insult her intelligence." And the likes of her usually spill their facts with such unassailable self-confidence. Nice work. *
The word "Aloha" is used wonderfully here in juxtaposition with the "lost in translation" concept. The story itself is a smile, but the apposition forms a great motif. Nice, Epiphany. (Like my pun? LOL) Fave--
is it okay for me to love this?
...teas and eels and who couldn't smile here? Reading this? With a London bus?
BANG.
Fun read!*
Good one Epiphany. I like the dialogue, the abrupt changes of pace and location, the plays on words and references - lost in translation - had some amusing and squirmy encounters with eels myself when I was in Japan. Not my favorite breakfast food. Fave (*)
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