by Bobbi Lurie
i offer myself to be swept clean of agony deserted and denounced due to conspiracy late at night i ate taco shells from the cupboard tacos are a flowering plant just south of here i admitted my part in between mouthfuls of blood old photographs as images which won't lift in this landscape which requires i swim in my earnest bathing suit though how many changes necessitate a purchase shaken earth so many girls waiting to be women lied to by their mothers about the infinite distances as if a world of rivers and fruit stores filled with insects not to mention the holes in my autobiography such fragile sticks against the doorway like boys once were devouring an innocence with equal innocence meaning myth is what the other half listens to we are all headed to be forsaken by animal hearts a mountain of poor attempts unredeemable once denounced cows pigs sheep blood the perfume merchants cover that scent of putrid flesh every handcuffed ended relationship drained of muscle and skin such basic substances compose the human flesh hallucinating hunts that resist the murder at dawn each sharpened blade splinters for the pleasure of dying in bedrooms other than this one no one sleeps in this panorama of open eyes bitter incandescence no one sleeps mummified into the violent chill of biology i bristle as if serpents waiting claw and caw of birds who glow like roses in artificial sight to be frivolous in the taverns any flamenco dancer worth her weight in weather dreams of damp earth connected to every glass of wine like that rose grimaced between teeth let us not pretend protest all you want
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Phrases I'd like to praise here are many. I'm thinking "stream of consciousness" though that's a phrase for phase. Is that how phase is spelled? Aphasic. The title for one. Tacos are a flowering plant & any flamenco dancer worth her weight in weather & like boys once were devouring an innocence with equal innocence meaning myth is what the other half listens to & the violent chill of biology & beyond
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I like this a lot. The rhythm, the building of images and senses. I particularly enjoyed "the violent chill of biology" and "forsaken by animal hearts".
Stuffed with life and movement. Really nice.
Every word counts here, and like Kirsty and Susan I love the movement, the build up. I'll add to Ann's lines these:"I offer myself to be swept clean of agony" and "we are all headed to be forsaken by animal hearts." The closing brings us full circle "let us not pretend protest all you want." Ditto the fave.
Thank you so much Ann, Kirsty, Susan and Jane.
I so appreciate your reading my work and commenting--
bobbi
"any flamenco dancer worth her weight in weather dreams of damp earth connected to every glass of wine like that rose grimaced between teeth let us not pretend protest all you want". I'm definitely with you there, Bobbi.
Stunning, Bobbi. I love the quick-fire pace, the gorgeous language. All of it is just beautiful.
Dear Carol and Marcelle--thank you both so much for reading my work and commenting on it.--bobbi
"let us not pretend protest all you want" this ending sums up this glorious piece perfectly. the blood and bones of truth is all over this piece and it cannot be denied,protest all you want. Bobbi once again you blow me away. Looking forward to more from you.
Dear Sara,
Thank you so much!
Lots of great images here.
Dear Matthew,
Thank you. I appreciate you reading my work and commenting on it.
Enough images here to keep the brain spinning for a full day. So much life and power here. It will be a great challenge to translate this and keep the flow and the music and the energy. What on earth have I gotten myself into :-)
Dear PJ--
thank you--yes--impossible to translate--for me as well (in english)
breathtaking. punctuation, capitalization are overrated (as are punctuality and capitalism) - i am so glad somebody with more sense and sensibility confirmed it! enjoyed this very much!
Dear FF,
Thank you so much!
b.
This is good.