by Ann Bogle
When Kayla arranged to have her breasts reduced and divorce Lyle, it was because she was a Pagan and he was Born Again. That had always been true and became truer. He would not take Prozac and talked Jesus to her as if from a bucket. His Bible was as shopworn as a service manual.
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Forthcoming in Camroc Press Review, Barry Basden, Ed., 2012.
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Stunning piece, Ann - "He would not take Prozac and talked Jesus to her as if from a bucket."
Strong writing. So much in so few words.
I appreciate it, Sam.
Love the bucket, shopworn Bible. Fave
To get to the heart of a relationship split in 55 words and to write with flair. Completely impressed. *
James, thanks so much for the catch (shopworn). I shifted a word to make up for it. Thanks for the fav.
Thanks, Meg, for the neat reading and the fav.
love this. the title! the ending! i think i want to comment on this in a way that doesn't offend either pagans nor christians (though sometimes it is fun to do so), like here: !!!!!!!!! great piece.
Perfect.
Somehow, every word seems inevitable.
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Love that last image. I saw a few of those Bibles when I lived in Minnesota.
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Ann, amazing what you did here with 55 words. *
Thanks, Marcus!!!!!, Frankie., Bill*, Jack, and Christian, for your comments and fav's.
Love this one, Ann. A perfect micro!
Great similes, Ann.
Thank you, both, Marcelle, and Susan G.
For a snippet, there's a lot of story here. I really love the way you did that.
Thanks, Foster.
Speaks volumes in such a spare and evocative way. Simply powerful. *
Thanks, Robert.
"His Bible was as shopworn as a service manual." Strong images, sharply observed. *
..He would not take Prozac and talked Jesus to her as if from a bucket...powerful in both subject and delivery.Love it!
Thank you, Kim and Darryl.