When collapse is a wave that curls the floor under itself I give myself to it and fall through a white void where the only differentiation is a black square that recedes at a speed greater than that of my descent; it trails long thin clouds that buckle and collapse in the viscosity of the air, gardens of absence I hurtle through, the boundary conditions of an empire of scatter where waveforms and their collisions open onto plains and cities and languages and the ways each dissolves into possibilities. In one of them I sit in a chair and read “When collapse is a wave that curls the floor under itself.” I look across a white room at the black square on the wall then back at the page. I give myself to it and fall into the white spaces in a black mark. Aerial, I turn to watch backward sentences recede. Beneath them trail long thin clouds that wave slowly back and forth in the viscosity of the air. I inhale them. When I look up again from the page and across the room at the black square on the wall I hear collapse approaching. When it is a wave I give myself.
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An experiment in recursion and variation.
Capitalism was sleepy today.
I spent a long time tinkering with this.
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I lost the train here: "...and fall into a white spaces in a black mark...." I like what this piece is attempting to do. At first I thought it would benefit from a longer, stanzaic pattern, but then realized that form was following content in that the piece is about inward collapse and the words and lines seem to be doing that as well in this truncated form. Maybe you can play with it in another form just to see if the images achieve a bit more clarity. There's something grand here.
I so wanted this to be all one sentence! ;)
It made me think again of the redwood wave: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=twj0dxU99aE
Really enjoy the formless way you are playing with this one, Stephen and like JP and W.F.'s suggestions, too. Play away and Happy New Year!
Just to add to the confusion, I like it just as it is.
"I hear collapse approaching"
Read the stories of Stephen-Paul Martin. His most recent book is Changing the Subject.
Love the way this circles around (recursivity - duh!). Very physics, and black and white. Peace...
thanks very much for the reads and interesting, useful comments.
JPR-->about a half hour after I posted this piece, I found the typo that threw you. I knew it was going to have that effect---but I found it while sitting in a publick house with some comrades so there was nothing I could do. It seems that these short forms have to be constructed with great meticulous care...the sentences make quite big environments sometimes and do it in a compressed space, so it's like there's a lot of pressure on the surfaces. So they have to be correct. I fixed it.
WFL-->the redwood wave is fabulous. Really pleased that the piece evoked something that cool for you.
BY-->thanks for the suggestion. I hadn't heard of him and am looking forward to checking out his work.
Happy 1111.