by Sally Reno
Just a splinter of incident lodged in my psyche.
This is amazing. It makes poetry out of my first marriage. Love it!
Again. Short (very), good and cruel (in a good way). *
Ooooo, what great comments! I adore 'cruel in a good way.'Thanks so much, Ann. A whole marriage Katie? You must be worn down to a nub. (thank you)
This gave me goose-bumps, I felt like I was a sheep too, and it was a scary thing..
Good form. Great compressed tension.
Thanks, Sam. Thanks, Susan. It is a scary thing actually.
This has as much tension as a coiled spring - full of dread and menace. Hard to write a short piece like this with so much power and force. *
The prey and the predator. Um, we just might have to dub newest queen of the micro. Peace*
Wow. Thank you Michael. Thank you Linda.
I found the images in this to be nearly as important as the overall micro. If micro is your main thing, you might find Joseph Young's work interesting.
Thanks, Sheldon. No, micro is not my main thing but I like it. I'll check out Joseph Young.
This tiny piece has some serious bite!
Huge impact in less than 50 words, Sally, the title adds another layer.
Thanks so much for reading Kathy. And thank you for your comments. Much appreciated.
Ok, so here goes.
"I am the flock of sheep" to me is such a beautiful way of defining the entire relationship. The flock of sheep in this situation is willing and happy to be mauled, or else it would have played out a different way. You'd have two wolves, killing each other.
Wonder what kind of baby a wolf and a sheep would make?
Btw, I'm always jealous of wonderful micro fiction like this. I'm gonna peek in and figure out the moves.
A 'weep' perhaps? (the baby)
Usually, a flock of sheep go willingly wherever...plenty of time for second thoughts once cornered and ripped into... sigh.
Sally, the brevity of this piece is what makes it glimmer, and adds the wallop of defining the "you" and "i" in these masterful lines. Bravo!
Golly Robert, thanks. Means a lot!
Thanks for reading and commenting Marcus. Appreciated.
Just found this Sally. I enjoyed and, strangely, laughed! It must be the wolf in me.
Thanks, Steve. I'm glad you laughed and I hope it was the wolf.