There we sat, myself and I, at a small folding table in the middle of the lab beside the main, l-shaped workbench. The lab was empty - always was - except for the two of us. My life's work was scattered across every table. The computers hummed and the fluorescent lights buzzed. It wasn't as organized as I usually kept it, but my focus was centered on the rooks, queens, and kings in front of me. It was my move. I moved my black rook over three spaces. Then my life's work spoke.
“You know, what you've done is highly controversial?” I asked from across the board. I made a move — white pawn up two spaces.
I peered around the empty lab, taking stock of all the investments — the technology, the supplies, the freezer; it all cost so much. Then I looked at the outcome. I looked at myself sitting there, planning my next move, my index finger and thumb scratching my cheek. “It was worth it,” I said.
“What's it like outside?” I asked.
“Not sure,” I said, “I haven't left the lab in a few months. I have almost everything I need to survive down here.” I made a move — black bishop across four spaces.
“So why'd you do it?” I asked. “Cure cancer? Paralysis? MS?”
Again, I peered around the room, filled with its machines and computers and microscopes, and chemicals. The fluorescent lights did half their job; there were a lot of dark, cold spaces. Magazines, journals, and notebooks were stacked fifty and sixty issues high, creating moveable and immoveable walls. In all of that stuff, that rubbish - the records of my life - there was not one instance of a personal life, an outside life. I noticed this myself, and I know I noticed it from across the table.
“No family? I asked and moved the white King.
“Mom passed away two years ago and dad passed when I was a teenager,” I said. “How about you?” I moved my black pawn up a space.
I laughed as I moved one of my white knights and picked up a black pawn. “I've got what you've got, just none of the experiences. “
“You're beating me though,” I said. I had only captured four of his white pieces; he had nine of my black pieces. I moved one of my pawns forward a space.
“You gave me life. You haven't helped me live. So, why'd you really do it?” I asked again and moved a white queen to the right one space.
“Like I said, I have almost everything I need to survive here. I need someone to play chess with,” I said. I moved my black knight over two and up one, and then I watched myself make a move — white knight, up and over to the left.
“Checkmate,” I said. “I win.”
“I guess we do,” I replied. “Let's play again.”
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Not really sure what inspired this. I just remember thinking to myself, "wouldn't it be funny to play chess against yourself."
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This is really interesting Matt.
For me, when "I" asked "So why'd you do it? I felt like the answer to the question about the lab, needed more than I responding with needing someone to play chess with.
You set up this very interesting scenario, the location of the lab, its expense, I feel a torn person in the narrator, the fact that he starts out saying "There we sat, myself and I..." but I feel like I wasn't given the prize at the end.
Thanks, Cherise. I was concerned I left too much out, with that intention.
There may be a few things I know about this character that I can put in and still maintain the tone I was looking for.
I think you ought to try putting it in. I get the tone you are after, and I applaud it. But I wanted a bit more, something for me to hang my hat on - forgive the trite phrase - but something that would let me understand the narrator a little more. I don't think a lot is required, just that tiny tad that will let me hook onto him, as a narrator.
Matt,
I think this revised version works really well! Nice nice job expanding it, without going overboard!
I pictured the conservation and gameplay clearly. It had a nice pace. I sort of got an Asimov hermit thing going on here. Nice work. Thanks for joining the Sci-Fi & Fantasy group too.
Veronica, thanks for your comments. I'll be posting something else to the group soon.
Hi Matt,
About the I-I thing. That's interesting. I've only ever come across that once before - something Kurt Vonnegut did - and I just can't remember which of his books it happened in. A dialogue between a character and himself. Maybe you know. Really weird effect. Such a simple idea. Kicking myself I never thought of it.