The Last Quiet Morning
by Lucile Barker
Just another one of those cool spring days when you don’t know what you should be telling the children to wear, give them money for fried potato wedges for lunch instead of the nutritious inedible meal that the school would feed them because this is a work day later, sorting clothes at the church jumble sale. Your daughter’s coat is thin and getting too small, she complains that it feels like a boa constrictor when she puts it on. You think of what puberty will bring and think of a trip to Marks and Sparks on the weekend.
“Go, go, you’ll be late for chapel, you know how Father Mark gets when you aren’t in your seats. And for the Lord’s sake, can you stay neat until you come home and your Gran is here, no holes in those leotards, mind you, Mary, and James, keep your jeans clean.”
It’s only two blocks and you don’t worry, go and start the breakfast dishes with the stuck on marmalade and that cheap peanut butter from Tesco. Things don’t happen here, life is so boring in this little Irish town. Until you hear that shaking boom, and you can see the smoke from the front window, and the remnants of that little blue vehicle, a Morris, a Vauxhall? You know it went past and now that you are on the stoop you know that it was a bomb, and there are flames from the school and you know that death is happening messily, and there is no way you could run any faster.
This is tightly written, and visceral pulling at the end on all the tendons connected to fear and loss and the loss of a child.
Yeah, I like the writing, the voice, the story the characters, the setting, everything. Except the bomb. But that's what makes it an exceptional story.*
wow Lucille.
fave, Lucile. IRA?
nicely done!
I am just stunned by the vividness here of how quickly things can change in our difficult world. *
David, I think it was a personal grudge against a priest at the school and I am channeling things to get the rest of the story.
Beate, things change in a instant, and I am glad you liked it.
This was an in workshop assignment and all eight people did such different things in the small amount of time we had.
It seems lame to praise the title, in a way, but I have such difficulty with titles, and this one is so very very good. The whole story is just perfect, Lucile.
This is handled so well. The interior monologue works.*
I love that wild twist at the end! And all so visual! I can see this scene!! Excellent! ****
I enjoyed this, thanks.
Excellent piece of work, Lucille. Bravo!
Thanks, Sean. I have done poetry for so long that I wasn't sure my prose was working!