Tenderoni
by Kathy Fish
My boyfriend and I grab our bikes and pedal across town for a parade which has probably been cancelled anyway. Ahead, Mark's skinny calves pump, his day glo rain poncho flaps behind him like a flag. He stops and gets off the bike and I catch up to him.
"Oh, damn,” I say. “A kitty.”
"It looks sort of lumpy," he says. There's a drop of rain holding on to the tip of his nose and steam rising from his shoulders. "We should move it."
There's a big to-do for several minutes as he searches for something to push it with. He tells me he doesn't want to use his bare fucking hands and I tell him of course, no one would. He finds a sodden cardboard box and peels off one side of it and shapes it into a sort of scoop.
"These ponchos are worthless."
"Stop goading me," he says. He's trying to work the cardboard under the kitten's carcass. He takes off his sneaker and nudges it. Stuff oozes out, soiling the toe of his shoe.
A car comes and we go back to the side of the road. It weaves around the kitten, but another one comes behind and roars right over it, flattening and severing its head from its body and we go back out and stare at it awhile.
"Put your shoe back on, baby."
He studies my face and tells me if I have to smoke, if I'm going crazy, I can go clog up my lungs under the viaduct and I tell him I'm not going crazy yet.
The scoop falls apart in his hands. His glasses are splattered with rain. He pulls them off and rubs his bruised looking face, the new whiskers on his chin. I hate watching him struggle, but he struggles a lot so I'm getting used to it.
"Fuck," he says. "And fuck and fuck and fuck and fuck."
Under my poncho, I clench and unclench my hands. My cigarettes are in my pocket, but I leave them.
"Baby, it seems like there are people whose whole job it is to remove dead animals, like we have here. I feel crummy. And I have to pee. I want to take a bath and go back to bed and sleep for a hundred hours."
"I'm sorry," he says. "This is awful, isn't it?"
The wind stirs up and blows my hood back. The rain comes harder, in waves.
"Only if I'm not still your baby." I swallow rain and move closer. "Only if I'm not still your tenderoni."
"Oh," he says. He pats my head and he's never patted my head before. He stoops and picks up the kitten's smooshed head and its body and the pieces are so small in his hands. Together, we walk to the side of the road and I watch as he chucks them, hard, into a patch of high weeds.
I like the strong visualization that you present here. As a reader I'm made to feel very connected to the scene... sounds of wet pavement and traffic, the motion of the bikes, the misty air, the dead animal. T
here are two poems that came to mind as I was reading "Tenderoni": William Stafford's "Traveling through the Dark" and Mary Oliver's "The Kitten" - but neither poem focuses on the human relations as you do here - and I like that in this story. The relationship serves as balance to the, basically, horrific scene - that you level with humor, frankness, and emotion. This is a great read.
Thank you so much, Sam.
So much love for this.
One of my favorites from SQ last year. So good.
thank you Ravi, that's so nice to hear!
Oh, another favorite of mine. Love seeing it again.
thanks Cami!
This got to me. I faved it, as love sometimes dies like a kitten in the road.
Richard, thanks so much....
Fuck," he says. "And fuck and fuck and fuck and fuck."
Never has that word been more divinely.
The line that resonated most this time around was "He pats my head and he's never patted my head before." Following the "Oh" and the narrator's tender line...it's just so brutal and so perfect.
Ellen's great for getting you to keep at this. Damn.
A very tender text, and a wonderful description of their relationship. I had a moment of disbelief where you say "he's never patted my head before". The repetition of "head/hands/hard" works well for me and adds to the impression that this piece is breathed, rather than written. Thanks for sharing, Kathy.
I LOVE this!
I like how the dialogue reveals lots, especially the tensions and the insecurities in the relationship, while saying relatively little. It makes me nervous when he takes his shoe off.
good thing you kept at it
Thanks for reading Finnegan, Katrina, Brendan and Gabriel. I appreciate the kind words!
This is the first piece I've read on Fictionaut. It was hard to read but really affecting. I've been there, in the rain, watching the second car deliberately run over the dead animal. And people suck. But this story doesn't. Good job.
Thanks, Kathryn and welcome to Fictionaut!
So glad to have the opportunity to read this again. I fell in love with it the first (and second) time I read it. This time I watched carefully to see how you work your magic, but that was hard, because I fell in love again.
thanks so much Jeanne!
Great story. I wouldn't change a thing.
thank you Matt Baker!
"We should move it."
the pronoun here signaling something, later the clenching of the hands under the poncho, the patting of the head, still later the reader supplying the severing of the relationship, as severed as a cat's head in the rainy street, and just as tragic.
a whole story here in a glimpse, for those who sometimes claim (in jest? hyperbolically? to provoke?) that it takes 1000 words just to clear one's throat.
so many ways to read & write feel.
Thanks for reading and commenting, Gary!
Very good story.
Thank you, Matt!
I have read this before and love it with the same intensity.
It has this way of saying something profound in a simple and perfect way.
You need to teach short short fiction at a college. This is what you need to do!
Oh Debbie, you are too nice, thanks. Do you know, I did teach short short fiction this past summer at American University! But it was high school students...but still, it was fun....thanks again.
So perfect. Tenderoni. Yes!
thanks, Mary!
Great! I like 'Stuff comes out" haha
Really nice.
thanks, jason!
Really lovely Kathy. The dialogue especially feels right on, just the way people talk. Wonderful.
Thanks, Tara!
Scrupulous, pitch-perfect tightrope walk accomplished here that voice pieces require. The narrator must be deft, a poet, while seeming to be everyday, spontaneous, just chatting us up. The narrator has to intuit but not know more than she is saying, but seem compelled to say it. You land this one perfectly, I think. Tenderoni. And the cigarette stays unsmoked.
Thanks so much, James. You make me feel very good about this story.
The wind blowing her hood back gets me in the gut. More and more gets peeled away as the relationship both discovers and changes itself on the side of the road with the cat. Amazing.
Thank you so much, Pia!
One of my all-time favorites. Tenderoni! It's so fine.
hey, thanks Randall!
Brilliant in its honesty. Difficult for me to read because it made me FEEL something. I love the sopping rain as its own character. For me it worked metaphorically - as if the girl or Mark were sobbing inside for the death of the innocent kitten.
Thanks, J.N. I appreciate your thoughts on the story very much.
Not to be weird, but there is nothing I like better than a dead animal story. Love how he pats her head and then chucks -it- in the weeds. Oohee. How she says "your tenderoni." Icky good stuff.
thanks, Jamey
I remember reading this in SLQ.
Such a great story.
Hey, thank you Joshua! Much appreciated.
Damn your endings are so fucking good. They always complete the story so well. Fuck. Yes.
Really nice to get another read on this one. Thanks, Jeffrey!
The dialogue here, and the details, are absorbing. The scene is so well described and realized. Really remarkable.
Kari, I don't know what I've done to deserve all these kind words from you this morning, but I can tell you I really appreciate the boost! I'm dashing out now, but thanks so much for your support!
Ms. Fish, you have an uncanny way of putting the reader into the story that I sometimes forget I'm reading. I dunno if it's the rain in the setting or the kitten's demise, but I shivered. Storytelling doesn't get better than that! *
Ramon, geez, thank you! I really appreciate these great comments.
"Fuck and fuck and fuck and fuck."
I agree with Ramon; it felt like I was standing on the side of the road with you, getting drenched by the rain.
Nicely done, Kathy.
Oh, thanks so much Erin! I appreciate the read and comments. Glad you liked it!