by Johnsienoel
I pinned it
there
and there
and
there.
Then stood back
to survey my handiwork.
The truth stared
blankly
with crossed out eyes
a red stitched tongue
lolled to the side.
Arms and legs prone
spread eagle
ready to receive
another.
Where was the
pop when I pricked
with the pin?
He was too stuffy.
I wasn't happy.
Somewhere in there
and there
and
there
was the gray matter.
My worth fluffed
up in the tidy confines
of a remnant
man
loosely stitched
together.
So I lopped off his head
and reworked the creation
by adding a heart
to his sleeve.
Then I burned him.
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Originally published in Metazen.
http://www.metazen.ca/?p=2651
A special thanks to Christopher Allen, and Flawnt, Frank and Julie.
What inspired this piece? I suppose my ISSUES with men.
Ouch! Nice form, well done!
Oh yes. I liked this piece when I first read it at Metazen. Well done. The tone and form are just right.
Thank you Sam & Christian. I especially appreciate the comments on form. This was a departure from my more controlled style as I try to grow and stretch out of the creativity box.
That ending actually caught me by surprise and made me laugh out loud!Nicely done.
Thank you, Darryl!
Love it every time I read it.