Quicksand
When anxiety and ambiguity shipwreck your consciousness,
to whom can you turn,
besides your younger, repulsive self
and your older, fabricated one?
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Introspection.
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Neat piece.
Take out "At 25"--makes more universal.
"when anxiety and ambiguity shipwrecks your consciousness"
should be
"when anxiety and ambiguity shipwreck your consciousness"
Highly recommend the fabricated one!
Like this poem a lot
I liked this a lot.
Wondering if perhaps the "and" in the last line should be "or"? It seems to me that much is caught by that choice.
Bill - thanks, you were/are dead on. Silly mistakes :)
Cherise – I went with "and" to allow my multitudes to exist simultaneously.
Thanks to all for your comments :) Means so much!