The Two Week Vacation
The father, broad chested with muscled arms
sweats through his sleeveless undershirt,
curses in German under his breath
cramming suitcases into the old Plymouth,
for their two week family vacation.
The mother, a pony-tailed beauty, thinks she looks fat in her
new blue-checked pedal pushers and white blouse tied
under her full breasts— in the latest style.
The kids stay clear when she's in her “mood,”
slamming cupboards doing last minute stuff.
Never ready, when the father wants to hit the road,
they're not speaking, when he pulls out
into San Francisco fog, thick as a blanket.
At the toll booth, the kids skirmish
over who gets to hand the man the quarter.
The girl, twelve, frizzy haired, gangly and awkward
is yet to ripen and hates everything about herself.
The boy, sitting shotgun, ten, short and freckled—
whispers he hates his sister's guts.
She hisses he's stupid
and kicks his seat with her Keds.
The mother grimaces, her headache is starting up.
The boy fiddles with the radio;
the father yells, turn it down for crying out loud.
Johnny Mathis comes on, the father sings
to Chances Are, catches his wife's eye
through the rear view mirror and winks.
She ignores him.
The kids make loud farting noises.
When they reach Sonoma,
blessed sun breaks through the fog shroud.
The mother smiles.
The father exhales.
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This poem brings up some precious summer memories. It has been published in an anthology in a literary magazine, Persimmon Tree put out by Mills College.
So much to like in this: the way the tension builds, personal dynamics (reminded me with startling clarity of me and my sister at that age with the 'rents on road trips), how the gloom seems to tie in with the weather, the smile and exhale at the ending (brilliant), and the effectiveness of 3rd-person narrative. The distance suggests an objectivity that inversely enhances the intimacy shared by the narrator. *
Thanks Matthew..my hope with this poem is that it has a universal appeal that will resonate with many readers.
Very good poem, Joanne. I enjoyed it very much. It does have universal appeal because it is located squarely in a specific universe.
[Since the majority of stanzas have five lines, why not go the whole way and give the poem that form throughout?]
Hi Bill,
Originally the poem was longer but when I submitted it to Persimmon Tree magazine I had to shorten it. Your idea about being consistent on the number of stanzas is a good one.
glad you enjoyed it!
I like this. Paints a vivid picture of all those disastrous family vacations.