by Javed Hayat
Against the setting of the sun, the hunchback walks deep into the tunnels, into the maps and mazes of the underworld. The less privileged labyrinthine models of society that exist beneath the glittering lights of every metropolis.
His body illuminated by the descending shafts of light on the damp walls. Graffiti art stays visible against the spot-lighting effect serving as an enduring advantage, bringing to limelight the whimper and the grandeur of the universal underdogs. Clawless, defenseless creatures missing a spine, for years feeding off the regimented droughts of restaurant leftovers dumped each night around the neighborhood above their forbidden enclosures.
Soon, he finds himself walking down the isle of discarded bottles of liquor, cramped spaces, schizophrenic neighbors, starvation and enchantments of heat and cold. He finds himself at home, tired and without food in his belly or a penny in his pockets.
He can hear the blind feet rumbling of mad scavengers roaming the structure. As he trudges along, there are faint sobs of the things that weep in the dark. A silhouette of a little blind girl holding the hand of her mastectomized mother struggling to light a fire. Lonely hearts copulating in faded sleeping bags with zippers that barely close halfway.
Their collective show of affection against the night forms an invocation of its own, a humming of the night life where shadows with varying intent and purpose roam the damp alleys.
His next door neighbor has hung himself this morning. Nicknamed the King Rat for his penchant to trap down the raccoon-size rats and bash them against the hard concrete walls come every night.
The hunchback notices the door to his room ajar and resists the temptation. Grudging the body of his neighbor now restful against the magic end of the rope. The wear and tear of death settling him down once the little struggles have dissipated.
He enters the crudely made settlement that is his room, with an old mattress and logs, while his companion yelps, its tail wagging, and prefers to stay outside for now.
There are clumsy artworks done in charcoal against the walls of his room. Dark lines of convictions. Serving as mathematical hieroglyphs deconstructing the very nature of existence. There are running commentaries on life and death, Darwinian impressions, Genesis, dreams of blonde hairs and mortgages paid.
He fumbles against the seemingly battered, barely functional old fashioned set of stereo system in his room, till it submits to playing off a ghost of Bach in four-voice fugue in the background, made up entirely of sixteenth notes.
He keeps the volume low, barely audible, to serve as an unobtrusive accompaniment to many thoughts of the day running loud in his mind.
The hunchback lies down on his old quiet bed and stares at the ceiling. The throes of sleep gently enveloping him, rendering his body numb, and allowing his soul to transcend beyond time.
This writing reminds me of Max Frisch's "Man in the Holocene" one of the best books I've read.
"the whimper and the grandeur of the universal underdogs"
A swaying Gregorian-like chant of netherworld yearning.
Wow.
This is epic.*
Beautiful writing here.
Thank you so much Dianne, Matthew, Kitty, Tim & Susan for your valuable feedback.
"A four legged shadow serving as his longtime companion against the all-consuming vacuum of the universe."
‘They can smell the fossils on us.'
"The wear and tear of death settling him down once the little struggles have dissipated."
Good carved out piece, great pacing and excellent word choices to keep this train on the track.
"For someone who is just a number on a Social Service Providers logs, a bad statistics, alphabets mean everything."
"‘They can smell the fossils on us.'"
Powerful line.
Thank you so much Darryl & Erika for your valuable feedback.
Just stunning. I loved this sentence: "Time and again, he has wondered if in the beauty of this world is withheld the secret of a new universe." And the ending. And everything else. *
Thank you Beate for your wonderful comment. Cant appreciate enough.
"Dark lines of convictions." I'm taking this phrase as commentary on the whole impressive piece. Well done!
Thank you Bill for taking time out to read and for your wonderful feedback. Really appreciate it.
"There are running commentaries on life and death, Darwinian impressions, Genesis, dreams of blonde hairs and mortgages paid."
Marvelous piece. Strong writing. *
Thank you Sam for taking time out to read and for your wonderful comment.
I like how you did that
Thank you Verkaro for taking time out to read and for your feedback. Really appreciate it.