For instance, my sister's husband. If I say brown socks, yellow boxer shorts, fishnet undershirt. If I say plastic bag and two tepid beers. And a voice that glides to falsetto when he: you're a tad too obscene for my taste, Julia, while he tries to light the filter end of his cigarette.
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Author's Note
This microfiction was originally written in Swedish at a workshop. Years later I sent it, in English, to "Short, Fast and Deadly" (ed. Joseph A. W. Quintela) where it appeared.
Lots of characterization is 55 words. Good job.*
I haven't used the word "nifty" in years but it just popped into my head. Nifty :)
I like this. (I'd like to read it in Swedish, too.) There is a whole family story in those lines.
Yeah, love this, especially because it's such a shard of life.
This slipped by me. The fishnet undershirt is the kicker. The detail does all the work. Splendido!
Great glimpse of a world here. *
So much with so little.*
Very funny. Fave*
What a doofus! Fav.