Love the title. This compact poem says it all. And the shape, the arrangement of the words works great--made me think of an egg timer somehow. The sand running down until only four specks of sand are left, then three, then one, then ... zip. Suggestion: Maybe consider placing the full stop on the last line by itself? *
I know the feelin', bro.
Thanks, Steve and Matt.
Hmmm..you can't stop it.
Thank you, kitty.
*, Gary. It's almost hypnotic. Well-written...as usual.
Indeed, indeed!
Sweep is a perfect word here, perfect spot. Good poem.
Thank you, David.
Thank you, Ed.
Thank you, Sam.
Oh, Gary, you have nailed our quiet desperation.
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Thank you, Barry.
Never did take a liking to sweeping.*
Thank you, Tim.
*work watch sweep life away**
Thank you, Nonnie.
Love the title. This compact poem says it all. And the shape, the arrangement of the words works great--made me think of an egg timer somehow. The sand running down until only four specks of sand are left, then three, then one, then ... zip. Suggestion: Maybe consider placing the full stop on the last line by itself? *
Thank you, Ray.
Thank you, David