This is the company I keep: long-limbed, tree-climbing ankle-biters, sugary sons and dangerous daughters of the fruit canners.
There they are in the mornings, sprung from the mud of their forefather's factory, a plum firstborn holding a string of rose hip sisters, rough mulberry brothers. Sweet-talking fire-breathers, bright as vegetable skin, intestines clean and dark purple, organs encased in endocarps. Feeders who reach into golden boughs, feeders of flower ovaries. Some, maybe a plucky baby or a pair of pomegranate twins, will live forever.
You stand in the front where you can be seen, carrying oranges in the folds of your hiked-up skirt. A sea captain leagues away will open his window and smell you. Your scent cures homesickness and scurvy, your scent makes summer month festival gypsies fall in love. None of your sibling's superlatives fit you; you are neither the prettiest nor the wiliest, neither the snake-charmer nor the double-crosser. Pithy, you wake up the lime burner's children and the tanner's babes with your harmonica. They will wade through salt solution and rawhide to get to the citrus of, the citrus in your hands.
I see you sometimes, seated on school steps, when you are peeling fruit for the young. Your eyes are on the mountains, and your hair is in your eyes, and the pucker of your lips is steering you off-tune, you who are tone-deaf already. That knife finding the core, both mine and the orange's, you hum hurruming jazz, a harp bop, double drums, alto sax. The juice that stays on my neck when you tip me back, catching me in an alleyway, holding me upright as the oranges tumble and strike the backs of my knees. You cup your strong-smelling, sticky-soft fingers around my ear and say let's blow this city.
Em, this is a stunning piece of work. Nothing to change in it. Its perfect. Conjured up all kinds of smells, tastes and desires.
Feeders of flower ovaries.A sea captain will open his window..and smell you. These are bright sensuous sentences that sing with a marvelous voice.Beautiful writing that wrings everything out of the motion and still finds more. Excellent job.
love this entirely, em dash. "none of your sibling's superlatives fit you" ... this piece is surely superlative-worthy!
For me, this is poetry. Lovely images and great skill with a combination of first and second person.
yeah, i can see why you liked gyoza. you're another word obsessed songwriter! this is fantastic. the last paragraph! great buildup, and you use 'pithy', one of my favourite words. i like the physicality of your language down to the good food. pomegrenades everywhere! star stuff!
ps. the author's comment is great, too. we need more author's comments here anyways.
Like it. A sort of invocatory sense to the riff. This phrase pulls me up: '..to get to the citrus of, the citrus in your hands.' The 'of' there makes that arresting.
Marvelous story!
There is a wonderful flow to this. Lovely writing. A fave.
Em dash, who are you? This is amazing work. Are you Garcia Marquez in disguise
Full of vivid imagery. Well done!
Beautiful writing. Just gorgeous!