Redeye Rabbit
I knew it was just a matter of time. And sure enough, one March morning, I woke up sneezing again, stumbled into the bathroom and roamed the shelf. No allergy pills left.
The pharmacy was still closed, so I went to the bakery. The woman behind the counter looked just like me: Redeyed and sneezing.
“Two croissants”, I said, and pulled out a fiver.
“I don't have change,” she cautioned. “It's one crap morning. I need to go to the bank, but I am alone.”
Then she looked at me. Our red eyes were meeting.
“I could go,” I offered. Still not sure where that came from, but there I was, all hard-shell, soft-core boyscout.
She handed me a fifty.
I walked away. She doesn't even know my name, I realized. Not that the fifty would get me anywhere. That thought in mind, I entered the bank.
My vision was kind of blurred - I didn't notice the big rabbit with the gun until I queued behind it.
“One hundred,” the rabbit said to the cashier.
“Euro, Dollar or Yen?”
The rabbit scratched his big ears. “How would I know?”
I looked at the fifty in my hand, poked the rabbit, and handed him the note. In exchange, I took his gun, and robbed the bank for good.
“And now?” asked the rabbit once I was done.
“Now we'll walk out of this sorry day,” I told him.
And so we went, sneezing.
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Author's Note
This is on the fun side - a flash story inspired by and written for the the weekly 52/250 flash challenge. The theme this time: "Allergic Reactions".
Again, this story is (partly) based on a true story: the bakery scene happened like that.
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PS: you might know the rabbit - it is borrowed from a recent 52/250-story: "Mafia Marriage" by Marcus (Finn) Speh, which is up here: http://bit.ly/bDsNrs
I love it! It's the stuff of daydreams and escape from the mundane. Nice!
Dorothee, seems to me you've got the flash thing going well! This was fun to read, and I love that she "robbed the bank for good". My kind of narrator!
Always wanted to rob a bank. And not for the money, but just to do it ... This is just ... peachy. I loved it. Even the rabbit. Don't know why. Doesn't matter.
Susan, Cherise, James ~ thanks! glad that the story is fun and dreamy to read. it probably is the first positive creative outlet of my own spring allergy.
Lots of fun! Surreal -- I cn imagine it filmed. Peace...
Great flash, Dorothee. I like the voice here.
A fun fantasy! Great flash.
Linda + Sam + Kim - thanks!
now i would love to see that rabbit in a film, too ;)
and interesting how those flash challenges bring out different voices in my writing - also induced by other stories from fictionaut.
Funny-- adorable, actually. I love how the bakery woman trusted this person and so I trusted this person and was surprised. Kind of a metaphor for life, yes? No? If your're one of the lucky ones, you thought "no"--
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Slambang ending. Lots of fun!
Susan, Jack ~ yes, slambang fun, and at the same time, a metaphor for life. reading it again, i also thought of this movie with Michael Douglas: "Falling Down" - a normal day, and then things tick over.
Quite fun, Dorothee. Very imaginative!
Such a great piece. It skips along so fast, the dialogue and the scene are interwoven so well! Love this one, every time I read it!