by David Ackley
They'll leave soon
for the drive north on the interstate
to see the leaves flagrantly die
oranges,
reds, leftover green,
reluctant green,
in buses—
behind smoked windows, white blobs
in the dark,
stalking
the peak of decay as
We all go to look at things,
damped by the dark windows
forgetting why we're here
I could tell them to walk the trail,
and watch the dog lope ahead,
over the spattered
maple, beech and birch,
dead and dying, orange, yellow, red,
hitched to this fringe of silver bark
turning on a stem,
speckled, tattered, frayed and
unstitched, and underfoot
in pewter and rust,
browning, awful and inevitable
flattening into the damp
scent of stale
cinnamon, huff of dog his
tongue lolling, trees gratefully moulting,
to be stripped in the icy wind
the next great solace of trees,
Single leaves rock down a faint air,
ahead more still
spill over the filigreed trail,
petals tossed at a wedding,
golden and turning in that light
they used to weave into life
Wonderfu images! "*"
"stalking
the peak of decay as
We all go to look at things,
damped by the dark windows
forgetting why we're here"
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I love California. Love love love California.
But Fall in the North, back where I grew up, is the sason I miss. Strange but I always thought of Fall as the season of beginnings.
This makes me want to fly to Boston or Minneapolis. Great piece.
Lyrical.
Beautiful. Bu;t I esp. like this line:
"We all go to look at things,/ damped by the dark windows"
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There sre some beautifully descriptive lines in this. I enjoyed it so much. *
Thanks all for the comments, I'm glad you found this to your liking.
Yes to this.
WOW
Thanks, James, Amanda and Anonymous for looking kindly on my falling leaves.
Fabulous descriptions - you make me smell the autumn scents as well as see the leaves falling.
So much that I liked here:
'to see the leaves flagrantly die
oranges,
reds,leftover green,
reluctant green,'
I loved the idea of 'flagrantly' dying and 'leftover green, reluctant green', the repetion of green too.
(I'm not sure if the spacing will come out right here but I liked your line breaks and indents).
This sounds really good read aloud, really good.
For some reason, I thought to look at this again, Ellie, and happened on your timely, and much appreciated response. Something felicitous in this...Thanks so much.
You're very welcome, David, I'm pleased you found it.