by David Ackley
It's over when this dull-eyed part-time cop waves us past
the mall gate, the skewed Toyota SUV, another cop with tape,
a smoking EMT, and something under a draped white sheet.
These skimmed fates of others slip by fast.
No one means to go that way, on an errand to the mall,
saving a minute for shopping, something that banal,
audited by strangers passing, barely slowing, glancing.
Time's never saved, whatever we meant.
Do with them or don't, all our minutes get spent.
14
favs |
1687 views
14 comments |
88 words
All rights reserved. |
This owes --not enough--to the influence of Phillip Larkin, especially "Ambulances," one of the great poems of the 20th century.
This story has no tags.
"singular irregularities."
Oh, wow! *
"Time's never saved"
*
This made me grateful for the beauty of my life, because the end can be nothing more than a snip of the scissors. Well done, in every phrase.
So much truth. Wow, indeed.
Lxx
It helps to restructure value itself to read this poem, in a good way, though the poem has a gloomy atmosphere that feels separate (in a good way) from the speaker, yet attached in human unity. *
Thanks, Friends, all, for your reaction to this dour little piece picked from the roadside.
Tch tch--cosmic crash-poem convergence? Dueling lyrics? In a good way, to quote Doyen Ann. (I liked them both, btw) *
What everyone said. ****
*
*
*
Thanks, Matthew, R.K., Sam, David and Gary for giving this a read and your favor.
Fine poem, David. "skimmed" paired with "fates" and "audited by strangers" especially fine.
*
*, David. Really good writing. I love the piece's premise. Great line:
"These skimmed fates of others slip by fast."