consolations

"...otherwise pleasant" Oh, but I do love a happy ending. *

You always nail it.*

Atomic submarines were our friends.

We always called the sailors from off the atomic subs, "nukie pukes." Which was an unkind way of acknowledging their superior math skills.

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More truth. *

Strong way to open. Good poem.

Many thanks for the reads and comments.

best

david

great opening and close, especially.*

*, David.

Eloquent. Love the end! *

There's a muffled quality to this. Just the right weight to
you think of where

you'd rather be

Nothing.

"we swim in failure"
Perhaps, but this poem is a success.
Nice work, David.

Thanks, Carol and Bill for the comments and readings.

The "nothing" gives a sense of despair to this reader.
Minimalistic yet quite powerful. ***

Just read it again and love it even more!(Wish I could fav it again.) $)

Thanks Charlotte and Brenda for liking this bleak little number.