Steel beams. Welds painted over green. Yellow numbers of some sort. Old phone booths. Tags on the walls. I looked up and saw where bits of water fall down from the overpass. Pigeon up there. Washing his wings or something like that. Greyness. I was in a truck. Down a hill a stop light. People there with sunken faces. Frowns in the late afternoon and early evening. Not a place that you want to walk through. Not if you didn't have to. Not outright dangerous, but near those parts. A difficult area. Then a curious movement. A figure steps out from the crowd near the corner. She stretches her arm out and cups a hand. To the sky. Black suit red hair. The head looks upwards. The person is testing for rain. It's a natural act. Something of humanity still lives. No actual apocalypse had occurred- just the juice of things had sizzled out of the people, the area, the earth. The earth is the earth but also a corner of an inner city street. Crowd does not notice. They are in Plato's new cave. Pigeon does not notice. Territory tags recede for a moment. As does greyness. A millisecond there. Just a human movement. Tags. Broken phones. The overpass and the pigeon. Steel beams. The stop light switches to the affirmative. Everything changes. The world is always like that. Please proceed.
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Great little snapshot of life. The blinking images serve it well. Enjoyed this.
thanks sally !
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Like this idea: "No actual apocalypse had occurred- just the juice of things had sizzled out of the people, the area, the earth." Well said. The snapshot, bullet point effect is just right.*
Nightmarish daily reality. FV*
- No actual apocalypse had occurred- just the juice of things had sizzled out of the people, the area, the earth.-
Yes.
Lxx
This would make a strong little film.
thanks very much J.,Gloria, Letitia, Gary!
"just the juice of things had sizzled out of the people." Great snapshot, and maybe short film as Gary says. Great eye and humanity in the writing.*
"No actual apocalypse had occurred- just the juice of things had sizzled out of the people, the area, the earth."
Love this.
thanks much Gary and Bill !
This is a vibrant, true piece of writing. Good work, Brian.
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thanks very much Matt.
I love the sentence "They are in Plato's new cave."
This is one of those stories I'm eager to reread several times. Good job.