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I love the way this poem builds on itself like waves lapping a shoreline, Bill. Nice going.*

This poem is a real traveler. I like the (in)significance of "step uncle" -- significant because besides the "I" who is the speaker, he's the only other human at that point in the poem, and yet how random a relation it would seem to be. The imagery is thick with an imagined nature more real than real set beside a tacky luncheonette humanism. *

Great use of the line throughout - rhythms, and the closing of the lines. Good form.

Love this stuff--love to read it asnd be inspired by it. It's just so interesting and magical, the way you make it connect.

Great statrt, great rhythm, great close. Beat-like sound but with real teeth. So real surreal.

Great rhythm, I knew .. I knew ... I had .... Final line ripples out. Thank you.

Lovely poem, Bill, I remember it from A-minor.
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Bill, solid, lyrical and strong.*

and I thought of my aunt, her failing eyes
a thousand miles away on a dirty beach
looking for signs of onyx-colored birds
and I knew I had to visit that beach
for I too wanted to see those birds
and I had the binoculars necessary

Beautiful. *