Un Americano
by Ann Bogle
Ann and User Name are going to a coffee shop in a northern city. The weather is predicted to be 25 degrees. The cafe has exposed log walls. User Name's apartment is in the warehouse district. The coffee shop is near the creek. Ann will wear black boots, black jeans, and a gray cashmere sweater dress. She will not look "great." She will look even. Her hair will be in a knot from not brushing it after washing it. User Name will greet her by telling her she's right, she is tall, and Ann will think of their middle-aged grief, though she feels twelve and thirty-nine. He will be tall. She'll say, "You're tall yourself! I so like tall!" And they'll dive for a table by the window when the elderly lawnmower repairman begins to clear it and leave. Americano, Ann will say, large, wondering if you pay in sex for that or if it goes on a tab or ledger adding up to gestures that add up to sex or money that adds up to the same thing as sex. He's tall. He's appetitive. He orders a danish. He orders a latte. His eyes are wide then narrow and brown. Hers are gray then they look away, toward the back door where a delivery driver has walked in, carrying a tray. Nothing is going to happen today. User Name has a missing toe, but she will not know that until the third date. On the first date, she will not know. The missing toe will mean, eventually, giving succor, not for the loss of it, a blade fell on it when he was eight, but for his hated father, his father who stayed up late and messed around in the kitchen making apple sauce and cherry wine.
i can't help faving it. i wish i could do it many times, damn sure right.
Oh, this is wonderful! I can see why it won the book!
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That Peg has quite the keen eye. Excellent piece!
love the voice in this...there's a world weary flatness and then offerings of insight and wisdom and then at the end, relief that perhaps in a cold world connection can be achieved even if through the conduit of loss
Such intriguing details!
"Appetitive"!
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A great voice in this, Ann - "He's tall. He's appetitive. He orders a danish. He orders a latte. His eyes are wide then narrow and brown. Hers are gray then they look away, toward the back door where a delivery driver has walked in, carrying a tray. Nothing is going to happen today."
Good piece.
Readers, you ignite me, give enthusiasm for writing itself.
Doug, thanks. I'll think of what you wrote (above).
I love the voice here. And User Name. Great surprise ending--not as in twist but just letting your mind go there (or you taking my mind there, I guess). Anyway. Love it. *
What they said above goes for me as well. Appetitive and User Name. Missing toe. You really do have a lot of nerve.
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Ann, I really enjoyed this, your strong voice, the twist at the end, and it really made me ponder after I read it, echoes larger than life. *
Thanks, Jane, James, and Robert.
Damn, Ann. Everything is there. Everything. All of it. *****
Thanks, Michael.
Oh I really loved this. I vow to make my year brighter and read more Ann Bogle fiction. It always makes me happy because it is. *
I'm glad I didn't enter the contest. I would have lost. Congrats, Ann. *
Wonderful, capturing voice. "Appetitive" - loved that. The details, that he is User Name - and she is Ann - says so much about the journey she has undertaken. Succinct and full of feelings - world weary, a tad cynical, yet still there is hope and a modicum of optimism. *
Quenby, thanks so much. James, Cherise, thanks for your comments. James, I don't always even try with those contests.
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