Event Particle
With the morning comes the repetition always the same scene always the same story.
In the morning the repetition comes after I am asleep before I am awake. With it recognition comes. Hello again. It's you again.
Repetition comes in the morning always the same scene always the same story. It does not fade. It does not intensify.
With the repetition comes the morning always the same hallucination of your skin.
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Author's Note
i've been making a series of event particles. they're all tiny pieces like this. the idea is that each should be kind of complex on it's own and also amenable to being assembled into sequences with other event particles to form narratives that emerge from the assemblage and not from the individual pieces so much. we'll see how that works out. anyway, here's a particle.
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I like the rhythm in this.
Neat concept involving the series of event particles.
yes, great pacing and I too like this concept. Will there be a Higgs Boson? I hope so.
As someone who wrote a story for Sex Scene: An Anthology, using repeating words from one sentence to the next, I applaud the rhythmic use of repeating words.
Interesting concept set out in your Author's Note.
thanks for reading & commenting. glad you like the piece: after i posted it i started wondering if these elements are too short. but if they are, then the piece won't work. i'm making particles and thinking about how to present them. i keep thinking cards, but am open to other ideas that aren't something i've used alot for sound compositions etc...so suggestions are welcome.
This made me dizzy - like watching Groundhog day, but it I enjoyed it :)
Interesting piece.
this is beautiful i love the title
This is beautiful in its rhythms and subject.
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works for me. i used to be a particle physicist, so this comes from an expert, too.
Like Stein with emotion.
nice. thanks so much for the reads and comments.
any time what i do brings to mind gertrude stein makes me happy.
Yes.
Um-hm. Repetition-rhythm, rhythm-repetition. Gotta love a particle. *