by Pia Ehrhardt
My father brought home a turquoise Porsche with red leather upholstery. My sister and I were small, eight and six, and fit tightly in the jumpseats behind my parents.
We went for a ride, tooled around Rome, circled the Colosseum, showing off for the people looking. My father made us listen to him double-clutch because he said that this was good for the car. The sound of this felt like a struggle for the engine, a hesitation, and then the car sped on.
We'd parked along the Via Veneto, the car within eyeshot so my father and mother could admire it at the curb. My sister and I ordered gelati and my parents had coffees spiked with grappa. Everything alcoholic in Italy tasted like licorice.
We lived in an apartment building with a steep driveway, and the car stalled half a block from home. My father made us get out, and he pushed it, one hand on the steering wheel, the other on the open door. When he got to the top of the driveway he thought he would push it and then jump in, coast to the bottom, and park it in the underground garage, but when he pushed the Porsche the car took off. He tried to hang on but it was heavy. The car dragged him and his shoes skidded along the driveway and my mother and sister and I watched in shock. I remember thinking then: You can't hold back a moving car.
The car went down the incline and over a wall and it fell two stories below onto a street that was usually filled with children. It fell obscenely with the bottom up, like a girl on her back with no underwear.
People came running from everywhere, and my father walked down, calmly, to look over the wall. No one was killed, but the car had flattened and my sister and I watched the tow truck pick it up, turn it over, and bring it away. The pretty blue paint had scraped away and the car was smashed up and gray.
My father never spoke about this and my mother didn't either until they'd divorced and we were on her patio having a glass of wine. She admitted he'd been drinking, but that's all. Not that he had a trip-up on common sense, shit logic: man, car, incline, fast, crash, death that escaped him that night, and for the next thirty years I was on the lookout for the other things he might do.
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This is a "Twenty Minute Story" that's on the McSweeney's website. I'd never written a story from start to finish and the time constraint made me get to the point more quickly than I normally do.
So vivid, Pia, and anxiety inducing. I laughed at this: "You can’t hold back a moving car." I think children and just naturally more logical than adults and you nail that. I so love how you write.
i enjoyed this one. i like how the narr's memory seems to pull, just slightly, against the story she's telling.... Like here: 'Everything alcoholic in Italy...'
Thank you Myf and Scott. What's better than having writers read your work? Sex and red wine and white cheddar Cheez-Its, but not much else.
I remember this one. Damn, woman, you wrote this in twenty minutes...whoosh. The ;photos are perfect.
Pretty much kicks ass here. The simple sentences really work
"You can't hold back a moving car"
etc
nice work, nice metaphor.
I remember reading this on McSweeney's. I loved it both times.
This is wonderful Pia. You know how much I love your stories. So rich in such a short space.
This is a great story. I read it in The Rose Metal Press Field Guide to Writing Flash Fiction and am so happy to see it again here. Love the line "It fell obscenely with the bottom up, like a girl on her back with no underwear."
This is one of those great true to life stories you read every great now and then. Those moments when the gods fall (a parent, a boss, an idol) and we never see them the same light again. It was also very funny.
Pia, you should check out Ben Loory. You two are similar writers. You guys have a genius for the writing very little and making us feel and wonder for very long.
Wonderful, vivid descriptions. Great story. Leaves the reader wondering what other hair-brained things he might have done next. Love the contrast between the pride in the beauty of the car and it lying wheels up:
like a girl on her back with no underwear.
paint all scraped off. Very funny and poignant. Fave *.
I can't help coming away liking the father a little. A great remembrance beautifully told and in only twenty minutes? Wow*
Stunning story. The turquoise Porsche with red leather seats makes the story esp strong and adds to the horror of what might have been. A simpler car and color scheme would have less impact somehow. Loved this!
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