Three Facts

Damn good one. Love the brevity. Nothing more needed.

i love this one. very very strong, opening like a flower, slowly and carefully. and the reading is wonderful, of an eerie quality, very personal.

really like this one...i'd even consider cutting the final line since the title speaks so well about it

in any event, i really like this

@david - i'm not sure about cutting the last line since otherwise you only have "three facts". with the last line, you have a life, "the" three facts, suggesting that this is it. the finality heightens the poem (and each fact) enormously a posteriori. it makes them whole, otherwise they're just fragments.

hmm, i see your point finnegan. sometimes i like to cut, cut, cut. maybe a revised title would do the trick. i don't know. sometimes i get leery about too much heft at the end of something. will give some more thought but obviously it works well as is.

This is indeed wonderful. The word "fact(s)" does make a slight dent in the impact with its repetition from title through each line though, for me too. Maybe because the lines are so strong and yet simple. How about a title such as "These"?

yes, susan, you hit on it. the repeat of "facts" is what made me comment about that.

thanks for all the comments.it's a poem written so long ago that i find it interesting to get these comments from new readers. i would tend to go for Finn's analysis. i think it comes closest to my intentions in the wording of the poem -- the finality of the "facts", to illustrate the finality of the end of a relationship...

Very concise and beautiful. Well done!

Elegant and a nicely escalating rhythm.