by Mary Lane
I don't remember much before my brother moved out, but one thing that stands out in my mind was the bathroom we shared. He'd pull a stool up to the sink so I could reach. Being eleven, he could see into the mirror just fine without one. Four-year-old me would hold out her toothbrush. He'd squeeze green paste onto it and then put some on his own.
While we brushed, I stared at his eyes and looked back in the mirror at mine, registering the differences. The hugeness of mine compared to the smallness of his. Then there was the shape. His pulled together at the corners and I loved that. So with my toothbrush still hanging out of my mouth, I touched the lids of my eyes hoping to smooth them out. Bright blue stared back at me while light brown came from Peter. Korean Peter Kim.
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This is an excerpt of a coming of age story set in South Korea.
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So sweet and simple. Nice work, Harley.
Good writing, Harley. Nice form and flow. I like it.
I really like the voice and the clarity of the moment, here.
Harley, wonderful work. I think what works so well about this piece is that it's not sweet and resists easy sentimentality. Hope you'll post more. *
Very cool, Harley. I'm enjoying reading your pieces. Your writing style flows well (to echo Sam).
Ditto. *
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Eager to read more. Fave!
Really nice... a typical scene, it seems, then rendered highly original... wonderful last line.
Is there more, please? Love the flow, and the relationship caught in so few brushstrokes.