by Kathy Fish
Their parents worry about them because they are so thin. Their mother fries steaks, untrimmed, in butter, mashes full cream into the potatoes. They cradle spoonfuls of food on their tongues and when their father says, “chew that up and swallow it,” they do, but the feel of it sliding down their throats is an agony.
They don't want to grow big and strong, they want to be left alone. They want to walk out to the open field behind their house, talk low, pluck caterpillars from the milkweed. Soon, there will be monarch butterflies the size of their mother's hands.
They get a hold of their aunt's cigarettes. They learned to read last year so they pass the pack back and forth, reading the warning label. They try to smoke the cigarettes, but their lungs are small and rigid, like stones in their chests. They lie down in the prairie grass and clutch each other, imagine dying together under fat clouds.
Their aunt comes to watch them sometimes when their parents have to go into Osage. As soon as the car disappears down the long, gravel driveway, she turns to them and says, “Go. Be One with Nature.” The aunt drinks Seven & Sevens and sits on the screened porch, one hand squirming like a puppy under the blanket on her lap. Some smell rises up out of the aunt they can't identify. They are careful not to get too close.
In town, there is a school and there are other children. They know this because the aunt has told them. They sit on the floor in the far corner of the porch, staring at the ham salad sandwiches she made for them.
“You two fit inside a shoebox when you were born,” the aunt says. “This big.” She holds her hands up.
They have heard the story, how their mother swaddled them tightly together in one receiving blanket and their father put them in the box and took a picture. He sent it into the local newspaper. The photo ran on the front page. After that, their mother did not speak to their father—or anyone--for one full month.
They want to hear more about the town, but are afraid to ask.
“You think I care if you eat those sandwiches? I do not. I'll stuff them down the disposal and not say a word," the aunt says.
The aunt has lupus. Her face is flat and round as a paper plate. A red rash sits on the bridge of her nose and across her cheeks like a pair of reading glasses. She regards them with her little eyes.
They read the Bible and the stories their mother types up for them. The children in the stories are forever naughty and forever in peril. In the end, the children repent and all is well. Still, God looms over their shoulders as they play, disappointed and angry.
They press their palms over a triangle of sunlight on the edge of the blanket. A truck rattles past on the road behind the stand of evergreen trees. Both girls turn their heads and listen hard.
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A very old story of mine originally published in a small print magazine called Wild Strawberries. My first Pushcart nomination. It will be reprinted in TOGETHER WE CAN BURY IT, my forthcoming collection from The Lit Pub.
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well-chosen details like stepping stones leading through a narrative of fragments to make a round and satisfying story
thanks for reading, Morgan, and hi!
I remember and love this story well.
You do remember it? Thanks for reading it again, Cami.
Enjoyed this story. I like the progression of details throught the piece. Actually, you've added many layers of detail in such a small space here. And the use of the senses is effective.
I do! The rashy aunt is hard to forget.
Thanks for reading, Sam!
“You think I care if you eat those sandwiches? I do not. I'll stuff them down the disposal and not say a word," the aunt says.
One of the creepiest, coolest lines the flash world has seen.
Beautiful and haunting, the whole effin piece.
thanks, so much David! I was going for a gothic feel to this...I'm glad you felt it
Eerily beautiful. Haunting, indeed.
Hi Marcelle! Thanks for reading....
Gothic! I wouldn't have thought to use that word...but after re-reading it now ... damn if you aren't spot on. The part about the children in the stories being forever naughty...still gets me good. Wonderful stuff.
Lupus from the latin word "wolf" cements this as a work of modern gothic, creepy, yet controlled. Closes out wonderfully. Bravo!
I've always been intrigued by the relationship of twins. This is a wonderful story.
Thanks Dean and Kristin!
HA! I remember Wild Strawberries. Are they still around?
Loved the story.
Hi Joshua, you know, I'm not sure. I don't think so. It was a lovely little mag. Thanks for reading this.
I’ve read this one a few times now and just love how all the accumulated details push and pull the story along. The twins long to remain together until they die and yet wrestle with the idea that they’ll have to one day go into town, to school with the other kids.
“They don’t want to grow big and strong, they want to be left alone,” unlocks the entire story for me. And this one: “God looms over their shoulders as they play, disappointed and angry.” And that aunt! No wonder they long to be together always.
The image of the twins swaddled in a shoebox is astonishing, unforgettable. Yep, I agree with everyone else, this one is definitely beautiful and haunting.
Thanks so much for the close read and nice comments, Arlene!
These twins are so alive to the world, how they see it and how they are seen by it. Love how you show hands throughout the piece.
Utahna Faith published Wild Strawberries and she's living now in New Orleans. I hope to see her next week. Not sure if she's still putting out issues of WS.
Thanks, Pia! I was so thrilled when Utahna accepted this story.
I love how this story moves. The narrative and POV is so strong - beautiful and haunting with a little bit of an edge below the surface. Great read!
thanks kindly Kevin!
"The aunt has lupus. Her face is flat and round as a paper plate. A red rash sits on the bridge of her nose and across her cheeks like a pair of reading glasses. She regards them with her little eyes."
Just this par., one dot of this, i could read over and over and I swear to God I don't know how you do what you do!
i hadn't thought about caterpillars for years, and then i read that part about the milkweed and suddenly i could smell them again! i totally forgot caterpillars even smelled... and not particularly good, either! what a weird experience. i must have alzheimers.
also, i like the story. especially the red rash reading glasses.
Thank you, Ben and Meg!
So many images to comment on--babies in a shoebox, aunt with a butterfly rash...This is so, so good. The second-to-last paragraph had me giggling. "In the end, the children repent and all is well." Priceless.
Thanks so much, Katrina!
Everything's already been said so I'll just add my admiration and thanks to a tremendous writer.
Thank you very much, D.P. I appreciate it...
Speaking of a collective POV. I think it was a very smart choice to use the collective in this story. I'm actually working on a series of collective POV stories so this really intrigues me. Nicely done, Kathy.
Thanks, Roxane. It is an interesting POV to work with, isn't it?
I remember this one!
Wonderful. A perfect flash. Details are extraordinary.
Oh man I get to read Kathy Fish! Yay!
thank you so much, Debbie, and hi!
Beautiful story, Kathy. Love seeing the world through these twins' eyes. Everyone else looks off! Thanks for a great read!
Hi Bonnie! Thanks so much for reading and commenting on this one. Appreciate the kind words.
I really enjoyed reading this story, Kathy. I love the idea of this darker take on twins. Twins run in my family, and my youngest siblings are twins, but for me there is this sort of mystery behind their relationships that is hard to fully understand. I could really see this story becoming a longer piece – I think these characters and the whole setup is fascinating.
Thanks, Kari, I am fascinated with twins too! Particularly, sisters and I have seven (yes!) brothers and always wanted a sister. I've wanted to expand on this one, now I feel encouraged to do so!
Absolutely love it. Fave!
Oh thanks Robert! Thought this story fit the theme of the Midwestern Gothic group you've started.