Some Kind of Change
by James Yeh
Over coffee a friend was telling me about a dream she had had the previous night.
You're going to think I'm crazy, she began.
Probably, I said.
She told me her dream, in which she had dreamed she was a building. Bricks, mortar, and networks of piping. I don't know why I felt like that, she said, but in the morning I felt like everything would be different, that I would be different.
Were you, I said.
No, she said.
Across the coffee shop I saw our server getting up from her laptop computer, where she had been checking her email and browsing the internet profiles of friends. I thought about my friend's dream, of change and non-change.
It's probably just because you're moving, I said.
Could be, she said. How's everything else?
The same.
She gave a sympathetic frown.
Well, I said, she's immature. So am I.
At least you had something in common.
At least.
It doesn't change anything.
No, I said, it doesn't.
Our server walked over with the check. Outside was cold and windy and the streets were still damp with rain. I walked my friend to the subway. At the station for a moment I considered getting on too, riding out of my way so we could keep talking, a habit of mine, prolonging things, sometimes too far. She was flying back in the morning, returning to a long-distance boyfriend I believed she had cheated on while she was here but didn't ask about because I thought it would have been too obvious and somehow ungentlemanly. We said our goodbyes.
Be safe, she said to me.
You too, I said back.
I turned around, walked down the empty streets, thinking about my friend's advice, my friend who had been mugged not too far off, not too long ago. A group of men in hooded sweatshirts passed me by. I kept my hands in my jacket, my face serious. Jaw clenched. It was that kind of neighborhood. The neighborhood was changing—the coffee shop we had just been in was evidence—but it was still that kind of neighborhood. Beside a high-rise and the park there was a gas station. A brown-skinned man was refilling his sports car as his wife and child waited inside. A car in the city, I thought to myself, was a curious thing—the maintenance, the parking. The man's wife was getting impatient with how long it was taking, she was opening the door. I walked on. I was the air and fog. I thought about what I liked about the city, what I liked about being there. So many beautiful things, constantly around me. I walked on. My body swelled up like a blowfish. My cheeks started to hurt.
I remained unchanged.
"She was flying back in the morning, returning to a long-distance boyfriend I believed she had cheated on while she was here but didn't ask about because I thought it would have been too obvious and somehow ungentlemanly."
great stuff.
I thought this particular bit was so tender, sublime, "I walked on. I was the air and fog. I thought about what I liked about the city, what I liked about being there. So many beautiful things, constantly around me. I walked on."
damn. this was super, james. really beautiful work.
I love this little, mighty story.
I love this little, mighty story.
Elegant elegant writing in this story. Unlike anything I've read in a while.
this is a sure fine thing--really great!
thanks you guys! i really appreciate the kind words
root for team yeh
Over coffee a friend was telling me about a dream she had had the previous night.
You're going to think I'm crazy, she began.--
james, i love the way this story starts, carver-esque, for me--
hey thanks for that, gary. i'm a fan of carver, though i haven't read that much of his stuff. which seems strange to me.
anything in particular you'd recommend?
where i'm calling from, his last collection--
glad you posted this one.
ditto on the where i'm calling from. very few stories in there that aren't good.
I can (and have) read Cathedral far too often.
"I was the air and fog." I could keep rereading that penultimate paragraph for some time. It's a lovely story.
thanks so much for the kind words, david and reese.
i know cathedral but it's been a while since i read it. definitely going to look for it/buy it/borrow it.
oh and my first story to appear in print was in a tiny booklet with a poorly drawn robot gracing the cover. my then girlfriend/now wife laughed her ass off, mainly b/c i'd been trumpeting the wondrous print journal that had taken my work.
enjoy the carver!
Svelte and lithe and skinny and how I admire that cuning last line which seems a kind of writerly refusal to go for the BIG moment, the gesture/thought/thing that changes everything.
Cunning was the word I wanted and, hey, we both came about on an October 11th-although I was first by about 89 years.
It is a strong story, James. I'd cut the last line.
heh david
hey thanks james
that's funny shya. your comment reminds of when todd zuniga read it. the first thing he said was "good story, cut the third line," although he might not have said the "good story" part
i agree with gary about where i'm calling from and i agree with shya. hey shya! and you know how i feel about this story. keep reading this story everyone
great story, james. i'd be proud of this as an entree into print. that was really todd's edit? funny. i do agree with shya, though.
If Todd was talking about: <"Probably," I said.> He would have ruined the thing for me. I enjoy a tiny tooth, and that one takes a chip out of the egg from the inside.
"too obvious and somehow ungentlemanly" is my second fave, and teams up w/the aforementioned line for me.
Couldn't imagine zapping the last line if it meant ending on the one preceding it, but I can understand how it might not work for some. Pulls out, breaks pace, and shifts abruptly into a final frame that utilizes a narrative filter you don't get anywhere else in the story. Would require more extensive re-working if it was simply re-moved.
But: works here, apparently worked for PEN America.
Ain't broke, don't fix (why the aforementioned Mr. Carver's early stories shouldn't be re-released in their "original" versions, in my opinion; a last-ditch de-Lishing does not help that dude; Mr. Erlewine and Co. are 100% correct, though: must-reads). Thanks.
I'm with Shya about the last line, but it doesn't break the story for me anyway. This is quiet, reflective, and effortlessly real. And I dig it.
hey thanks for the feedback everyone, esp shya who's launched the last line debate
thanks nicolle, for the "you know how i feel about this story," and the ambiguity contained in that line
thanks alec, you were there actually, when he said, although you might have been late. it was at the first "you don't know me!" planning meeting at that cafe in soho
thanks zack, for the close read. i mean, yeah, i feel you're totally right on in everything you say
thanks ben. i like your description: "effortlessly real"
So great. I love the line: "I was the air and fog." Haunting to pass through a life feeling like this.