Rasheed changes his mind about working for me. He can't bring himself to break with Uzma. The bond between them is too strong. I admire his loyalty, to her and to her parents.
Don turns out to be my most reliable ally. Plus, he brings a ragtag security force with him. They still patrol the neighborhood but they are effectively taking their orders from me through him.
"Now I know what a military coup feels like," Don says.
"Some of your people will need to be wearing uniforms?" I say: "I want armed security guards at the construction site around the clock."
"What's in it for them?" he replies.
"If they work the hours and do it right they have a job with a regular income. We can make it a separate company, a private security service. We can even branch out to other parts of the city if you want to get more involved in that kind of work."
"You don't let no grass grow under your feed, do you?"
"I can't afford to, Don, not after signing a loan agreement committing myself to servicing a hefty debt with a regular payment. Other income will cover it in the short term but I'll need to see revenue coming from the new housing and retail units as soon as possible to assure I don't go broke."
"Who's going to live and shop in this new development once construction is completed?"
"Downtown is beginning to boom again, retail business is coming back, corporations are relocating offices there, the city's jewels are being scooped up by smart investors with deep pockets and there's already an influx of professionals, office workers, sales people, bartenders, waiters and servers, you name it, looking for a place to live close to where they work down there."
"Why this neighborhood? Other vacant areas exist closer to downtown."
"I've been asking myself the same question, Don. I remember this area from my childhood. All the houses were well maintained, some with neat little lawns in front, some with big porches, steps reaching to the sidewalk. A leafy canopy of tall trees shaded the streets and yards back then. Now it looks like a bombed out war zone. You wouldn't think it's the same place. Still, when I heard from my real estate broker about this area being on the market at cut rate prices, I couldn't resist grabbing a piece of it. She steered me to the block with the three big houses, telling me what a great deal I would be getting for my money. Turns out she was right in more ways than one. Now, with this development, she thinks I will create a domino effect, not only in the direction of downtown but all around the newly constructed area."
"Real estate broker, huh? Is that who's talking you into this?"
"Nobody's talking me into anything, Don. She's a smart young lady with a good education. She knows the local market and its history. This city will never be the industrial giant it was. There's talk of dissolving it, breaking it up into smaller burgs run by the county or state government. But the downtown area, along with the riverfront, will remain an economic hub and, without the burden of responsibility for the neighborhoods filled with unemployed citizens and no tax base, the new city will thrive."
"What are they going to do for the neighborhoods?"
"What can they do? Keep law and order. Get the children safely to school and back home again."
"Assuming they have a home."
"That's where Uzma and Rasheed come in. I want to continue supporting them and their activities with the cooperative living and urban farming but I've gone as far as I can until I start seeing income from this development project. They have use of the space where their gardens are for now and they can stay in the three big houses. That's about all I can do for them at the moment."
"What about construction jobs?"
"Most of the work is being subcontracted but I want a crew on site to coordinate and keep things tidy. If you can run that operation along with security it would help out immensely. We'll need skilled trades people along with manual laborers."
"What's the status on your plan to build a movie lot and indoor studio."
"Well, it's on the back burner, of course, but once we have our construction crew together we can shift resources around and begin to prepare that site, too. When cash starts to flow, we'll be ready. Meanwhile we should continue gathering footage for the documentary film, involving Uzma and Rasheed as much as possible. It will become a valuable documentation of historic events if we succeed."
"And if we fail?"
"It will be good for laughs, a modern day tragic comedy."
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A little confused. No grass growing under feed? Did you mean they couldn't grow any more grass? Was that a typo? I'm confused about the relationship between the commune and the development and what's really in it for the commune. And what's with the security guards? Love this story. I'm just stuck here. Also, I think the dialogue may need to be broken up a bit. I miss Uzma. She's my hero.
Bad guy, good guy, just a guy. Wonderfully ambiguous stew pot going here.
I like the way you've taken Uzma and Rasheed out of the mix for a while. Keeps a tension hovering. Starting to remind me a little of Treme. I had the same initial reaction to the dialogue as Gloria, especially as Don seems quicker witted than he had at first. But it advances the story nicely.
Hi, Gloria. Thanks for reading and commenting.
"Don't let the grass grow under your feet," is an aphorism often used to tell someone to get moving. In this instance, Don is using the aphorism, correctly or incorrectly, to remark that John is moving quickly on multiple fronts.
The commune and the development are at odds, reflecting the actual circumstances in the city of Detroit. Large commercial interests are attempting to gain control of the urban farming franchise from the city, including tree farms, claiming they would create a viable tax base where none presently exists. While neighborhood residents would prefer smaller community owned and operated farms.
Yeah, the story is kind of dry without Uzma. But I needed some back story narrative to set up her next moves.
Hi, Gary. Yes, ambiguity, like conflict, is essential to comedy, I do believe. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Hi, Mathew. Yes, Don seems to be growing smart fast due to his relationship with John. I have actually cut out some description of that, wanting to keep the back story narrative to a minimum. Thanks for reading and commenting.
But...but...but...I thought the protagonist was going to try to integrate the coop into the development somehow, not make them separate ventures otherwise what's in it for UZMA, just the movie? (fyi I've had a brain injury since June which will take a year to heal and connections are a little flakey for me right now).
The protagonist may have bitten off more than he can chew. On the other hand, if the development is successful and generates a significant cash flow, Uzma's cooperative community will also florish. Ironically, can't have the one without the other.
A good read, J Mykell -
"What are they going to do for the neighborhoods?"
"What can they do? Keep law and order. Get the children safely to school and back home again."
"Assuming they have a home."
Especially like the closing.
Hi, Sam. Thanks. That's going to be the most difficult part of the story to fictionalize a happy ending.