Three dollars to last the rest of the month. My sixth grade teacher used to tell us all the time about how being poor is nowhere near the same as living in poverty. Hunger is not the same as starving even as Americans bathed in fluorescent coolant stand before full refrigerators to complain of starvation. That teacher, one of my favorites, wore the same exact faded black knit dress every single day the entire time I knew her from kindergarten until eighth. She covered rips and tears with cheap jewelry and light sweaters. Complemented this ensemble which she delightfully pronounced as ahn-sahm with frayed cotton socks and dingy blue Keds, matching my own. The dress smelled of teacher's lounge whiskey, and I hugged her tight, breathed deep and loved. My three dollars stretch and snap like an elastic band.
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Squeezing in today's challenge as I decide what's for lunch unsure of the structural integrity of my debit card.
Good read, Erica. Felt like she was my teacher, too.
I really enjoyed this one Erica. And I laughed at your Author's Note - "structural integrity of my debit card".
Thanks! My arteries enjoyed two Burger King buck doubles and a cup of water. I know you were wondering.
Great imagery here. Nice way of putting the words together too.
An honest outpouring that's held in check by some mean writing skills that keep the story on pace. That's tough to do.
And I suspect this sentence felt so great there at the end when you wrote this:
"My three dollars stretch and snap like an elastic band."
Nice, Erica. I like how this one flows and how you describe the teacher.
Thanks, Susan, Sheldon and Christian. I made one tiny revision for perspective.
I'd have gone for the BK double as well. Artery health is highly overrated.
Another great little micro-burst here. Going to have to get the digital equivalent of a rubber stamp that says, "Great work, Erica."
Good micro, nice character sketch of the teacher.
(maybe reverse first two sentences?)
James, no need for the stamp, heh. Thanks!
George, the first sentence had been nagging me, thanks. Slight revision, let me know if it works any better?