Someone has been setting houses afire along the lonely road I follow at night to my job. His method is simple to the point of elegance: He wedges a kerosene soaked shingle between the house's clapboards, lights it with a wooden match and slips back into the dark. The houses are isolated and too far from the volunteer fire station. My commute passes a scattering of charred cellar holes. Usually there are few other cars, and I've taken to watching ahead for the light, hoping to catch his work, alive in orange on the canvas of black sky.
One night, though, the light is in the rearview mirror, flashing blue. After I've pulled over, a featureless figure shines a flashlight in my eyes.
"License and registration...Where you heading?"
I tell him.
He casts the light on the backseat; "What's that?" he says. For a moment, stricken, I can't remember. What had I left back there, a gas can? Prybar? Shingles? A cooler, my lunch.
He waves me on in disgust. I drive away, wondering how he knew it had been me and Charlie and his chemistry set, all those years ago in that dry South Florida field, opening the gift.
A real pop at the end of this. Nice! *
Past sins (the fear never ends).
Lots of levels here. And the title is the steepest one. Nice work.
Clean and brisk with a great twist at the end looping back to the title. Nice work.*
Thanks Jake, Zlatko, Bill and Gary for the perceptive reads. There's reading and then there's Reading and the best of the latter is to know that there'll be the likes of you-all who get it, every time.
Wal, I do hope it's okey doke for a "reader" to weigh in, too. As a sub-sofisticate I no dowt have mist some of the signifi-cant intricacies and newances on display here, but by gum the nurrtive did get me heart a'thumpin', and I sho'nuf got me a hailuva kick out'n the surprise at the end. 'course I don't 'spect to ever be able to pronounce "Prometheus" wit' the proper accents wit'out a little he'p from me fren WikiPete. ;-) *
Aw shoot, MP, you're on Fictionaut aint you, where all the good readers hang? Thanks for lookin' and jawin'.
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I like the shift at the end. Good writing, David.
Thanks so much for reading this and commenting, Sam.
thanks, Oliver, for the read and fav.