At Ivy Green, the Keller's low slung house, I thought I came to find Helen, but was looking for Annie, the surrogate mother who rescued Helen from her lock box. Who suffered the sadistic mind-games, thrown forks and eggs, lost a tooth for her trouble, who resolved to stay until water became water. Half blind herself, her thick glasses like mine, learning Braille just in case. Her brother dead in an orphanage she barely managed to escape. She didn't want to leave him either, his apparition showed her the door.
Alabama in 1881 must have been a fresh hell, Annie's Yankee hostility a constant reminder of who had won the War of Northern Aggression. The Kellers giving in to Helen's every whim was a new battleground, yet Annie never yielded. The high, hot southern sun scorching her corneas even after the surgeries, books held so close her eyelashes rustled the pages, hungry to absorb every visible word, to ingrain them in case she woke up in permanent darkness. Going back to Boston was never an option.
My mother's insides finally settled, she stared out the window of Ivy Green, looking into some middle distance, beyond my father into the next life of no children, no responsibilities, a clean slate to begin again. I picked up Helen's Braille watch, the one lost in NYC and returned by a stranger, because who else would it belong to but her, as if no one else in the world was blind. I wondered where Annie's watch was now, the one I'm sure she picked up a million times and said, I want to leave, get off this see-saw. Could have. Did not.
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A prose poem from my forthcoming collection "Render" (Sibling Rivalry Press) in April 2013. This originally appeared on The Next Best Book Blog.
Fave, Such a great story here for me. Only partially because I know the places, but mostly because of the marvelous imagery you have soaked the story with.
Like this:
"My dad at the wheel, my mother's ulcer inflamed, she puked her way across northern Alabama that summer, from Huntsville and the rusting rockets to Tuscumbia, the farthest any of us had been west. We drove through raw, blistered towns, like a hundred Sally Mann photos come to life, the hollow-eyed poor, the rust and dust. Helen Keller would have wished herself blind."
Well done. Lots of story in not much space.
Good flow to the phrasings throughout, Collin. Good story, well-written.
"Alabama in 1881 must have been a fresh hell, Annie's Yankee hostility a constant reminder of who had won the War of Northern Aggression. The Kellers giving in to Helen's every whim was a new battleground, yet Annie never yielded. The high, hot southern sun scorching her corneas even after the surgeries, books held so close her eyelashes rustled the pages, hungry to absorb every visible word, to ingrain them in case she woke up in permanent darkness. Going back to Boston was never an option."
I like. *
rich, tight, beautiful.*
I appreciate these comments. This is the one poem in the manuscript that I have rewritten over and over and over again. Even after it appeared on The Next Best Book Blog, I still think it's too dense and could be tighter, but maybe I'm over-thinking it at this point.
Yeah, Colin, I wouldn't change a word. You convey so much in such a brief space, but at no point does it feel like too much. Enjoyed tremendously.
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Reading this makes me want to write something. I like this very much as it is.
Lots of story in a small space. Beautifully wrought prose.
I feel much about this poem thanks to your comments. Thanks, everyone!
Glad to find this—this is well done: "The high, hot southern sun scorching her corneas even after the surgeries, books held so close her eyelashes rustled the pages, hungry to absorb every visible word, to ingrain them in case she woke up in permanent darkness." is my favorite sentence. Prose poem seems about right though this seems more of a story fragment, part of something (much) larger, perhaps it's the landscape though or even just the Southerness, which is so large and brooding.
Boy, I loved this. This is just perfect. I would not rewrite any of this. *