This snit — furious with even the cats. Silkily they glide beside, round ankles, cross keyboard — trailing me. N-n-never screamscold a cat.
I need to run. Rampant, amok, wild on the savannah.
Ding-a-ling, La Friendessa, getting back. “WHAT!” I snap. “Always, you gotta get off, oh! — the subway, doctor, thrift-store, museum! For pooch-type predicaments, I had patience. So, you ever gonna replace that Pippi, god rest her, or what?” Click off, craving an old rotary you could clang down good.
Scrambling to locate my hat. Shoes, key!
The cats have chins pulled in by the time I break out.
Half a block on, trotting away: this frigid raindrop splats on my lid. Fine. I spit on the street and glare at the sky: raise ya!
Convinced I have a secret strain of asthma, undetectable unless confessed. My doctor's long distance — in subways, no doubt, or museums. Huff on.
A Labrador ahead, pee-pausing on hydrant.
Chew over unreturned messages, e.g., Mr. Placid's hep-tone text: Wanna catch a flick? (Scram! Don't you get this isn't MOVIE time?)
To the hydrant: “All-fucking-ready 2011!” Kick that pee-marked sucker to the ouch.
Here's a station-wagon dogging me now. Not! Stopping! Busy, see? Even if it is Father, reclusive these twenty years since he died. Sure, when I lunge to latch on, that silver wagon disappears in a swirl of exhaust.
Back to the house with a limp. The cats sit Egyptian on the staircase, watchful. Sotto sotto now, watching these watchers, I breathe their rhythm.
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from "Animal Behavior" at 52/250. Many thanks to editors John, Michelle, and Walter, as well as all the lovely writers there.
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Never before taken out so many words in order to put in others. Here, I cheated and put one back = 251. Why that one? Probably prying open the gate for more to follow...
Nice voice in this piece:
"I need to run. Rampant, amok, wild on the savannah."
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"Scrambling to locate my hat. Shoes, key!"
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"Chew over unreturned messages, e.g., Mr. Placid's hep-tone text: Wanna catch a flick? (Scram! Don't you get this isn't MOVIE time?)"
Enjoyed the ride. Good one.
Thank you, Sam, for coming, reading, kind words and all.
love, love, love this!
"The cats have chins pulled in by the time I break out." = magic
"Back to the house with a limp. The cats sit Egyptian on the staircase, watchful. Sotto sotto now, watching these watchers, I breathe their rhythm."
this has it all.
Wow, Meg, thank you so much. Music to my ear, your words are!
Strangely correct, the words are more like wordless signs than bricks, but you've built something solid out of something translucent. Don't quite know how, but it really works.
James, what an extraordinary comment. I love looking at translucent aside bricks. Me, I'll just read what you wrote over and over. (No! I'd better go read you, out there, if I want more of this.) Thank you, kind sir.