by Cami Park
ONCE, AS A BOY, the man at the bus stop holding a tri-folded newspaper found a small ragged poodle in his backyard, curled around a gutted tomato. He sat next to it and petted it for longer than an hour, until his mother came outside. She told him two things: one, that tomatoes are poison for dogs, and two, that the dog barked too much. Now, when the grownup man checks his watch and looks at the sky, it's because the words in his paper have begun to peel and slough, like dead skin.
The boss of the man at the bus stop was so terrified of the dark as a young girl that she would pee in the floor duct in her bedroom rather than negotiate the dark stairway to the bathroom downstairs. Now her corner office has a bathroom steps away from her desk, where she'll go sometimes just to turn the faucets on and off. She enjoys the sound of her heels on the hard tile. She wears skirts and dresses always, and is never in the building after hours.
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Originally published at NOÖ Journal.
Nice work, Cami. Straight forward approach that is very effective here - "The boss of the man at the bus stop was so terrified of the dark as a young girl that she would pee in the floor duct in her bedroom rather than negotiate the dark stairway to the bathroom downstairs."
I like what you do with this piece - especially at the end: "The sun has packed so many suitcases."
Thank you, Sam!
Poetic, nice. "The sun has eaten hearts, is regularly smothered." is my next favorite line after the one of the title.
Thanks, Susan, I'm glad you like it!
I really like the way you mix up the tone/structure, going from almost "overly" serious to metaphorical/daring. The last two lines symbolize perfectly what I like so much. I'm with Sam on that last line. I'd never think to have written that last sentence but now can't get it out of my head.
Thanks, David!