No destination. No expectations. No opportunity to be let down.
We'd let each other down and been let down enough to know not to set us up for future failures.
We filled the first 3 hours with silence and sideways smiles as funny looking commuters talked in outside voices about topics that should've been held to a whisper.
We didn't use voices at all.
Not me.
Not you.
The only communication came from a scribbled on napkin you passed that said:
Sometimes my dreams are really nightmares
I've spent most of my life looking for ways to illuminate what defines me while desperately trying to keep it all hidden. I am nothing
I held you as we approached the last stop.
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I like this story a lot. I like the fact that there are no wasted words, that you tell (show) so much in so little space. And the burst of sunshine at the end. Wonderful! This is a little masterpiece. A dozen stars!
Thanks, Jake. I'm glad you liked the story and really glad for your comment!
I wanted it to end at, "I held you as we approached the last stop." But that's just me. I see the purpose of the last line, creates even more uncertainty.
Either way, enjoyed.
Thanks, Sally! I was actually thinking about pulling the last line. I'll definitely reconsider if/when I submit.