Who you are
She hoped it made him happy.
The Chinese tattoo.
The used BMW.
The menthol cigarettes, Abercrombie jeans.
The new girlfriend, with her dark roots and party-girl pictures on Facebook.
Because you look stupid, she thought. Like you forgot who you are
or what you were doing
and where you were going,
in the first place.
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my first attempt at 55 Words
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Strong piece, especially the last line. *
Oh yeah, love this one for a thousand reasons fave
Nice ambiguity at the end there. *
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Sorry, just had to do that. I think it means, "making dinner," not realy tattoo material, but there it is.
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really, not realy ... really
First attempt? You've got the gift! Neat little story. *
i always enjoy a clean swipe at hipsters and BMW drivers. the very short force is strong with you, wendy.
Good form. I like the punch to the lines / sentences. Nice.
I agree with the sentiments above- strong, swift prose, scapel strong and carving a deep swath. If this is your first attempt, I say, have at it! Continue with fierce brevity...
Fave.
This is very good.
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