The box.
Of course, the box.
How could he forget? The music box disguised as a gift box that everybody knew was a music box. She had kept it in the parlor (she called it that though no one knew what a parlor was) as if it had always existed, as if it had been part of the world forever, one of God's First Creations, as if this box with this squashed pink ribbon and fake metal butterfly charm, as if this had been the very first object exchanged between Adam and Eve in the green-splendored garden.
He hunched low and forward on his bike, his 14-year old self, flying down the dusty back roads of this Great Midwestern Land, his head full of the smell of the algebraic girl he sat behind in math class just hours ago. Imagined himself Evel Knievel about to jump, cape flapping in the Bicentennial wind, over and across the minds of a hundred girls who would be there to kiss him and hand him flowers at the end. Yet still in his mind the image of the music box, its same song over and over and over in his head like something as primitive as flint arrowheads or Mesopotamian pottery.
He pedals at impossible speeds, the limestone quarry falling off to his left, what seems a thousand feet deep, the turquoise water calm at the bottom, the rusted machinery on the distant shore like alien objects abandoned suddenly centuries ago.
He pedals harder, zooming through the abandoned downtown, past Valley Drugstore with its missing “D”, smiling at the stupid Rugstore jokes at lunchtime. Around the bend with the enormous white oak that they said Abraham Lincoln had stood beneath in July 1864 even though his science teacher, drunk, told the class one day the tree was only, at most, 120 years old.
At the top of the hill, her house. Lawn gone to pot. Weeds sprouting up in driveway cracks. Doors bolted shut. Hot sun against warped siding.
He into the house through the unlatched window around back. Dust on everything. Fridge still humming. Through the living room with its deep blue shag, empty now of furniture. The stale smell of ages.
Into the parlor, so-called. Cobwebbed. All objects carted away, missing. Except for the music box disguised as a gift, there in the middle of the room, on the floor.
For him.
He touches the butterfly. Smiles. Cranks the small handle, afraid it will snap with age. Sits down Indian style. The music box comes to life. It is her voice, speaking directly to him, as if she knew he would be here now, as if she knew that he—this nobody neighbor from the other side of the quarry—the boy with the scarred face who mowed her lawn and raked her leaves, would ride his bike furiously back, back, back to her.
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A piece for Significant Objects, the object being a music box disguised as a gift.
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Beautifully soft and yet hectic in its reach towards a surprise ending. Very nice story here, and very well written.
Many thanks Susan--the ending surprised me too!
I very much enjoyed this story at it's sense of movement. I also wanted to take a moment and let you know that I am a huge fan of your Cultural Dictionary of Punk, which I found to be endlessly inventive and informative. My copy is copiously highlighted. I look forward to reading more of your fiction.
Sorry for the the typo: I meant to say "this story AND ITS sense of movement", not AT IT'S.
Hi Chris,
I greatly appreciate your kind words about the story and the CDoP book. Writing that book was about the most thrilling, challenging thing I have ever done, and I'm grateful for what you've said about it. Thank you.
"Hectic" is a great word to describe the story, Susan. And I like the scarred face detail at the very end -- seems to explain so much about his inner life. I don't know the Cultural Dictionary of Punk, but I'm going ot order a copy right now!
Josh-Thanks for the comments about the story--very glad you liked it! Several of the entries in CDoP take the form of short stories. I took a chance that I think paid off (my editor at Continuum was brave enough to let me try this). I've wanted to the Idler's Glossary for some time, and just ordered it.
Really nice style, yes. I haven't used Fictionaut enough to know if you can revise a story when it's up, to fix that "forgt" typo in the third graf? Anyway I particularly like the way it ends.
Rob--typo fixed. Thank you for the comments, especially about the ending. The word limitations of the Significant Object project are a form of liberation rather than constraint.
One of the better music box stories--indeed, it's the hectic passion you pose that makes this so grand.
This story is now the 'official' Significant Objects story for the music box: http://significantobjects.com/2010/01/25/music-box/
You can bid on it here: http://cgi.ebay.com/ws/eBayISAPI.dll?ViewItem&item=250569631060
Congrats, Nicholas!
Thanks Jurgen--honored to have been selected, and to be a part of the great writing community at Fictionaut.
Having seen the music box, I felt like I was in the cobwebbed parlor. I think it was the butterfly that inspired you. Beautiful.
Hi Paula--You're right about the butterfly in more ways than you know....And the photo of the box on flickr is wonderful. I feel a strange connection to that music box, and seeing where it is is comforting. Thank you!