You were a difficult child, they said, a picky eater, fussy about your shoes. You were always sneaking off after dinner to read, sitting on the sidelines drawing while the others played kickball. You didn't know how to be part of a team.
Was it any surprise your relationships didn't last?
Your first husband left after two years, the second stayed for twenty. "Your mother has problems," he told the kids. At the dinner table, he taught them to make fun. He taught them to be alert to the signs: "She's going to cry again."
Though he hit you, like the first one, like your father, it was because you provoked him. You never knew when to keep quiet. Except for the times you drove him crazy because you wouldn't talk.
Even as a baby, you cried in the middle of the night. Cried and cried though you weren't supposed to eat for another four hours.
Now, alone, you show up at a family event, and everyone tries to be civil. But it isn't easy--for anyone. "You irritate me," your ex says. And when you mention it to your aunt, she shakes her head and wants to know why.
"Is it your hair?" she asks. "Your weight?"
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published in Per Contra, Fall 2007
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I remember this one, Maryanne. It's so good and what a great title!
What a great last line!
Wow, this is great, Maryanne. Cuts me in half! I admire the way it progresses, and then hits us with that last line. Great stuff.
what a great voice, revealing just the right details, and that comment at the end, pitch-perfect
Great flash piece. Like the movement, the lifetime covered. Second person works well. Last line tells it all--no one gets her.
Oh, wow. The kids make fun. The men hit. The ex is at dinner. The aunt doesn't have her back. Every line's strong. But who is speaking in the piece? The mother? The word "weight" works on more than one level and the N knows that.
whoosh. Wonderful, strong piece, MAS.
A great miniature depiction of the "nuclear family." Really, nicely done.
Ooooooooooooh, this one hurts. It's gorgeous, Maryanne.
thank y'all!
NIce. It has a kind of inevitability about it, so the quirky last lines pull you up short, but in a satisfying way.
Damn- that last line is killer!
This poor woman that no one understands. What a fantastic piece of writing.
Oh, good flash! :-)
Oh this is sad. I liked that difficult child from the start, nothing difficult about her, at all, just in her own head, following her own head.
thank you all for reading and commenting.
Really like this, Maryanne,
The sadness in it comes to the forefront--as does the sad reality of shallow concerns being potential justifications for obnoxious behavior, as if the appearance warranted the beating, as if anything did. Loved this! xoxo, H
P.S. Or, irritation, of course, but the subtext of the beating still stays with the reader, even in the muted form.
Love this very much, Maryanne. Makes me want to ko that ex.
how wonderful this is maryanne. so nice to find your writing here!