She considers and reconsiders, she gives up and looks out the window. It's snowing. Someone's shaking powdered sugar on the tree limbs. Someone's turned out the lights. It's a beautiful morning. She tries again to write the first few sentences, but no, its not what she's looking for. She thinks about Virginia Woolf and that decision, that moment: What is the point of attack? What is that tiny second, where the river is diverted and the story begins? She considers it down to last the possible second. Not 7:02, but 7:02:56:23 and counting. That's molecular time. Down to the atomic particle. And not only that but--- what is the first thing we see? The first image might be a plane ticket on the kitchen table. But no that's wrong. Nobody has real tickets anymore. They're digital. They're on our handhelds. Yet there is something atavistic about an actual ticket. In an envelope. As a symbol. Not just of travel. Especially if that ticket is placed on the bare wooden table in the kitchen. Which is in shadows because its snowing. But the colors on the tickets are so bright they are almost glowing. Or maybe we see an upright black canvas suitcase, on wheels, parked at the door. Or do we see a wide shot of the neighborhood, the Italianate brick townhouses, the alley of ailanthus trees on both sides of the street. And is it snowing like its snowing today? These are the details that she considers, and reconsiders, as the snow falls fast from the cold air down to the cold street.
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I like the frequent return to the reality of snow. Nicely framed. *
"Yet there is something atavistic about an actual ticket. In an envelope. As a symbol."
Good piece. Enjoyed the read. *
Good writing about writing and all the tiny choices a single scene requires.
love how this goes all the way in and then out again, a real journey... very complete. and surprisingly lean...
"what is the first thing we see? The first image might be a plane ticket on the kitchen table. But no that's wrong. Nobody has real tickets anymore. They're digital. They're on our handhelds. Yet there is something atavistic about an actual ticket. In an envelope. As a symbol. Not just of travel. Especially if that ticket is placed on the bare wooden table in the kitchen. Which is in shadows because its snowing. But the colors on the tickets are so bright they are almost glowing. Or maybe we see an upright black canvas suitcase, on wheels, parked at the door. Or do we see a wide shot of the neighborhood, the Italianate brick townhouses, the alley of ailanthus trees on both sides of the street. And is it snowing like its [sic] snowing today?"
Very Robbe-Grillet (and that is high praise.)
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hi everyone and thank you so much for your comments, I was off the grid and nice to return to all this--- Bill, I went right out and bought an Alain Robbe-Grillet novel, THANK YOU.
Love the mood and the detail, the feeling of telescoping in.
That snow! I feel like I'm dodging through it, completely surrounded, yet still looking for the perfect shot.