Slim girl's eyes were all wrong, especially the free angles. I asked to see the X-rays of her dental work. Did they hide shiny mirrors just like in that myth of the Chinese bogeymen & their frantic dogs? My partner, a new kid on the block, whispered: oscillating between fatty & malnutrition. He didn't take good notes. Then he disappeared in the buried guts of the next afternoon. I had dreams of being permeated with the heat of Caramelized sisters. A declawed cat kept creeping along my apartment walls. A shriek. A woman's distant voice on a hot cell phone. Reminded me of water marks. She mentioned her husband had gone fishing without worms. That was code.
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My partner, a new kid on the block, whispered: oscillating between fatty & malnutrition. He didn't take good notes. Then He disappeared in the buried guts of the next afternoon. I had dreams of being permeated with the heat of Caramelized sisters. A declawed cat, creeping along my apartment walls. A shriek. A woman's distant voice on a hot cell phone. - this part, the kernel creates real mood for me.
Thanks, Meg.
Nice how you use the words so sparingly. Very adept.
I like the "oscillating between fatty and malnutrition." That's social commentary these days!
Thanks guys, gals.
Great ending.
Thanks, Cooper.
I love it.
Thank you, Tantra!