Reconstruction
by Jodi Barnes
My favorite lie is that he'd escaped the South Tower before it collapsed. Smoke inhalation erased his way home. Mine's better than mother's version: a stranger hurled herself onto him. The truth is when they stopped search and rescue, mother told father, Go. Even dead, his girlfriend meant more than we ever would.
Yes, indeed. Your mother's version is lame. *
terse and wonderful.*
an eternity in a grain of sand.
somehow, I believe this happened. Just as somewhere there are survivors who want to stay gone.
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The closing is disturbing and effective. Good wriritng.
Very effective.
Good work, Jodi. Crisp and clean. The opening hooked me..."My favorite lie."*
There's so much in this small piece. Learned much about 3 characters. Well done. *